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2018-05-31 03:11

Extremely boring. It's basically a rehash of coiling dragon. What's with all the zero chapter read five star reviews dominating the front page... My biggest problems with the story are pacing, followed by poor world building and one dimensional characters. Mentioning a city with tens of millions of people, how many thousands of cities, provinces, worlds and star systems there are do not equat to world building. You have to show that the world around you matters. Did your mc lost his flying bison in a city and it's so vast you can't find it? If not, than it doesn't matter how many hundreds of millions of people are in the city, they are but numbers and irrelevant and GOD, is the entire world in this story so irrelevant! It seems like nothing is happening in the world unless the mc is interacting with it. There are no sense of realism there. Mc lives in a castle, goes to some other castle, kills someone as a mission, comes back, mopes around in his castle because that's how you run a city, and voila he's the strongest in the world and goes to some place and... God the story lacks pacing and so many poorly done time skips. Show that passing of time matters before you do a time skip, not just when you need a powerup and can't find a way to engage your readers. ISSTH did a hundred year skip and I wasn't mad because before that I was with the mc on his day to day adventure, learning how important a day can be. And god the time skips in this story are so lame. He basically goes from zero to hevean rank in a few dozon chapters and heaven to legend in a couple more and by a hundred he achieves transcendence, the level that author introduced to be strongest at the start of the story. How do you keep writing once you've done that? Why, do a dbz twist, introduce a few more levels.And do you know how many interesting things happen to his life in the time he gets op as fk? You can count them on one finger, that's four if you are lazy, and god this story is so lazily written! You know, you can still feed on a lazily written, poorly paced story in a vacuum world, if the characters and their banters make up for it, and believe it or not, author fks that up really spectacularly. The characters have no depth, no complexity, no autonomy, no agency. They just exist to fill up a space. The two loving parents that got in trouble to motivate the mc, the cute lil bro to motivate the mc, the backstabbing gal to motivate the mc and hype the mysogonist fan base, none of them serves any other purpose and once you realise how utterly robotic and dull the characters are, how do you connect with them in any way? At least make up for their lack of personality with quips or humor but no, it's a serious story. A seriously dull story. And fk this Alice trope. When you have less personality than a side character with no dialogue, you don't get the girl, deal with with.

Lord Xue Ying

I Eat Tomatoes

3.9

1388 Chs