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CreamPuffDelights
CreamPuffDelightsLv107yr
2017-11-23 16:47

1. Characters are sloppy. Main character in particular can't seem to control himself and the author's portrayal of him is shaky as **** as his character changes from chapter to chapter, going from unsteady in one chapter to professional assassin in another with no foreshadowing. Similarly, plot line forces MC to make MANY MANY STUPID decisions for him to end with "I need to learn how to do xxxx better next time." Guess what happens when next time comes. It horribly idiotic and it never stops even after 200 chapters. Other characters are more consistent, but that has more to do with they being 1 dimensional rather than author's abilities. 2. word selection by author is awkward and the way they address each other can get on your nerves. 3. Story development is also non-existent. MC has little to no goals other than to graduate from academy and presumably slack off somewhere. His character however does not match as he can suddenly get hot blooded, suddenly fiery, and then regret once the fight is over because he showed off too much. Note that this does not change and he continues to do stupid things to show off repeatedly to no benefit whatsoever.

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Is this a harem

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Okay - so how do I say this nicely? This story sucks. Don't take me wrong - I mean, it's a good story with okay characters, but MAAAN, there's a LOT of inconsistencies and plot holes. I mean really - a ton of stuff where the author just changes tune on a whim. Just to give you a few examples; Early on in the story, the MC has a crush on the principal, and then suddenly the author mentions that the MC will take the principal on a date, but without the dialogue ever having taken place. Yes, this is just a benign example, but it gets worse later on, for example, in the latter end of the story, the author does away with the cultivation scheme that the reader is used to and suddenly introduces "levels". In my opinion, the author is a classic example of not having a clear structure of their world, history, and the characters in it. You will often find contradictory statements in chapter to chapter - and this is just one of many problems with the story. To be nice, the author does have nice character development and relationships. The MC doesn't just fall for the main love interest straight away but falls the friend, and through loss and hardships, realizes his feelings for the main girl - really nice, which is something that many other Chinese novels fail in. But this doesn't make up for what should be the concrete fundamentals of every story - CONSISTENCY! This story will definitely offer you a fresh take on a MC which isn't completely ignorant of his feeling. No face slapping or arrogant young masters at every turn with okay story progression. If you get hung up on details such as plot details and the author contradicting himself, then you should stay FAR away. Overall, I read up to chapter 500+ before skimming the rest of the chapters due to getting fed up with these points. The story end nice, however, as much as this story may portray itself as a single love interest, in the last 50 chapters, the MC suddenly gets himself a harem - also one of the things which will throw off a lot of its ******** readers. Final statement; it really feels like a story written by 2 or 3 different authors, with too many different cultivation methods, contradictory statements and views, vague/confusing races (e.g. Ivantians - which are apparently people who live on the Moon, and Kaedians (which I still don't who are or where they came from)). So yea, although, I'm generally forgiving in nature, this story just felt like a downright mess. It entertained me the first 100 chapters, but after that, I slowly got more and more fed up with it.

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