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MyLittleSisters
MyLittleSistersLv105mth
2024-11-23 22:30

Well in my humble opinion, of course without offending anyone who thinks differently from my point of view, but also by looking at this matter in a different way and without fighting and by trying to make it clear, and by considering each and everyone's opinion, I honestly believe that I completely forgot what I was going to say.

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Buff_n_stuff
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Sky_novel_lover
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Leon_Noxil
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A good book which has a very nice balance of story and romance. From the first few chapters one can get a proper vibe of the book. This sets up a pretty good foundation for the rest of the story. The story never tries to be other than it was introduced in the beginning, as a result we have a very grounded approach to the story progression. The mc is op but that’s never the concern of this book, the main focus is building relationships and personalities. The book adds a lot of new elements to the ‘Extra’ genre. We start with basic mc dying but intrestingly he wasn’t the one who met the Godess, someone else wished for the mc to be transmigrated. But the story he is sent to is a transmigrated Villain story. Its just intresting to see how the author just subtly incorporated this into the story. Normally I am not in the favor is systems but the system in this book has a unique charm and personality. Its actually a partner than a robotic quest generator. Writing quality of the book is actually pretty good with a good pace. The mc has a smart personality and does not act interact with the other 2 protagonists. He has in own goals and isn’t scared to change the events of the story. Nor does he care about the plot. Another important pro is that the author is actually active in communication. Even though the book has 160+ chapters , I still have a high chance of getting a reply from the author for a comment on the 40th chapter. This is very rare for most books. Again there are always some flaws like the academy tag, just being a plot device for introducing characters. I would also appreciate a bit more slice of life aspect to the story. It would be nice if the personalities and feelings of the FL’s would be more flushed out. I would have also appreciated a bit more world building. Because we somtimes I feel like we are dealing with a more medival vibe with magical devices but the next day our mc is in a amusement park going on a rollercoaster or someone is using a mini recording device to stay the mc. All in all this might not be the most unique book out there but the book knows what niche it is satisfying. And that’s something which I value very much, as from the beginning to the end I am getting what I paid for. This is a very good book for a casual reader and hope more people support and read this book in the future.

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