lets give this a go... personally i wish he goes SS4 Blue True Ultra Instinct + Divine Ki Giant Battle Avatar. and more thing added he may gain in marvel
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LIKEnow... the hârêm.... jean grey as the phoenix is a must for many many reasons. next is Natasha and wanda... these last 2 are also needed. so i ask, at least these 3
Well... i tried... but dude... your writing is aweful... get an editor or post it in chatgpt for free and fix this by saying. Make this text looks good and improve it. This is a fantasynstory. It will do way better job than what you can do.... its very hard to read with huge lot of mistakes, bad grammar, bad syntax and a whole lot of issues
that's a mouthful lol
i think I've improved as the chapters go on not by much but it's there
Psan:Well... i tried... but dude... your writing is aweful... get an editor or post it in chatgpt for free and fix this by saying. Make this text looks good and improve it. This is a fantasynstory. It will do way better job than what you can do.... its very hard to read with huge lot of mistakes, bad grammar, bad syntax and a whole lot of issues
I don't personally like jean grey but I'll keep the option open until the choice is solidified
Psan:now... the hârêm.... jean grey as the phoenix is a must for many many reasons. next is Natasha and wanda... these last 2 are also needed. so i ask, at least these 3
If i had to score your writing with 0 to 100, I would put it in 20, and your improvement was to 21. Honestly, go to chat gpt, post the chapters you have written and ask it to fix it to be readable as a novel in either first person or third person. This way it will jump to 60 points at least and be above average. But anyways, I will drop this and I may look at it again if I find your novel in the future then waste a few seconds to check if you have fixed the chapters or not.
William_Conwell:i think I've improved as the chapters go on not by much but it's there
thanks for the feedback as this is my first attempt at writing a fan fic
Psan:If i had to score your writing with 0 to 100, I would put it in 20, and your improvement was to 21. Honestly, go to chat gpt, post the chapters you have written and ask it to fix it to be readable as a novel in either first person or third person. This way it will jump to 60 points at least and be above average. But anyways, I will drop this and I may look at it again if I find your novel in the future then waste a few seconds to check if you have fixed the chapters or not.
then pls go read here in WN the "Book of authors". most of its content are useful for a noob. and take a few weeks to study how a novel is structured along with how to properly write. read about syntaxis and semantics pls.
William_Conwell:thanks for the feedback as this is my first attempt at writing a fan fic
ain't no way you said that with a straight face.
Well she was mostly chosen because of the Phoenix force not because of her looks and personality
William_Conwell:I don't personally like jean grey but I'll keep the option open until the choice is solidified
he was referring to the eventual harem
Kirozen:Well she was mostly chosen because of the Phoenix force not because of her looks and personality
