SWMarthaAmbonAuthor13d

2024-11-08 11:59

Welp, I've seen other authors be their first reviewers so I shall shamelessly follow along as a newbie hihi~ For the writing quality, I think I did pretty decent. In terms of grammar, use of symbols and figures of speech, and pacing (sometimes). It's quite detailed on their emotions and actions that the world is given less distinction. To explain why the world-building is less focused, this is because the land is naturally desolate. As mentioned, war occurred between the lands' beings and the Demon Kings people, and now there are mindless puppets working. It will naturally be desolate, ruined, and unimpressive. I didn't wanna point it out every time since they're still in the land of Gashu. But world or scenery descriptions will be improved once there's a better area. Next, for character design and story development, I think it is all good. Honestly I feel like I skip the small details too much, but it's because I wanted other characters to mention this character more or that character less. Something like that. So the character design is intentionally unmentioned. For the story development, well, it's that way for a reason too. Lastly for the stability of updates, I update once a day at 15:00. Don't worry, it will remain that way for a long time since I try to have an allowance of five chapters on timed chapter publication everyday. Though that is for now, I am thinking of turning it into an allowance of 10 chapters so I can have at least two rest days a week but who knows. Anyways that is all for this author's review. Thank you for supporting the world I created and fortified. I hope you meet and love my children well.

Freedom of Lies

SWMarthaAmbon

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21 Chs