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2024-11-20 12:25

Hello author. For my review I think the story's getting better. I read your review here too 😆 and I understand why you gave yourself that but as you said before the world descriptions did get better 👏👏👏. I don't know how you rated yourself specifically but mine's 4,5,5,5,4. I rated story dev as 5 cause i'm at the point that I cry for the children now. Please don't bully Nameless I feel like she's got so much on her plate. And btw I don't like how you're confusing the readers with the saintess thing 😅 please stop or can it?

Freedom of Lies

SWMarthaAmbon
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Ohhh hahaha who knows lmao But thank you for the proper review ᡣ𐭩 I will try to do better ᡣ𐭩

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Welp, I've seen other authors be their first reviewers so I shall shamelessly follow along as a newbie hihi~ For the writing quality, I think I did pretty decent. In terms of grammar, use of symbols and figures of speech, and pacing (sometimes). It's quite detailed on their emotions and actions that the world is given less distinction. To explain why the world-building is less focused, this is because the land is naturally desolate. As mentioned, war occurred between the lands' beings and the Demon Kings people, and now there are mindless puppets working. It will naturally be desolate, ruined, and unimpressive. I didn't wanna point it out every time since they're still in the land of Gashu. But world or scenery descriptions will be improved once there's a better area. Next, for character design and story development, I think it is all good. Honestly I feel like I skip the small details too much, but it's because I wanted other characters to mention this character more or that character less. Something like that. So the character design is intentionally unmentioned. For the story development, well, it's that way for a reason too. Lastly for the stability of updates, I update once a day at 15:00. Don't worry, it will remain that way for a long time since I try to have an allowance of five chapters on timed chapter publication everyday. Though that is for now, I am thinking of turning it into an allowance of 10 chapters so I can have at least two rest days a week but who knows. Anyways that is all for this author's review. Thank you for supporting the world I created and fortified. I hope you meet and love my children well.

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