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2024-11-12 22:28

I don’t like the way Caleb talks. It doesn’t feel cohesive/weird enough to be his own accent/weird way of speaking but its just different enough to make me think “what part of that feels wrong? Something is wrong but I can’t put my finger on it.” Otherwise seems written well i was just super distracted by how one character was talking.

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