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Lv34mth
2024-12-11 13:38

Writing quality: A lot of sentences feel artificial, like they were modified by AI, in a bad way. I feel less interested every time I read them... Story Development: It is okay as of now, I like the idea of becoming a business magnate in Pokémon world. Character Design: It is good. He feels like a dumb teen, but this is in a good way as it connects with his description. World Background: Now and then author tries put some info in a mysterious manner and for me it seems a little bloated. I think people should be given more time to first digest his initial idea about his AU. Overall: It is a good idea for a story, but I would suggest writing on his own(if he is including AI ... if not I'm sorry author) . It needs inprovement to generate that immersive feeling

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