Self-Assessment of My Work I’ve just realized that I can do a self-assessment, so here’s my take on my work so far. I think it’s turned out pretty well. The premise is interesting, and I’ve worked hard to make the characters stand out as unique individuals, rather than just background NPCs. I try to give each character their own distinct personality to make them memorable. There are a lot of details in the story, but I try to balance them with the pacing so it doesn’t overwhelm the reader. Even though the themes can be heavy at times, the reading experience flows well and isn’t too hard to follow. Of course, there might be the occasional small writing mistake here and there. I’m not a native English speaker, but I always do my best to correct any errors I find. I’m always open to questions and suggestions. However, I can’t guarantee I’ll add every suggestion, as I only make changes that fit with the direction I’ve already planned for the story. Overall, I’m happy with what I’ve created. I think it has a lot of potential, and I’d definitely recommend giving it a chance.
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None of her love interests are gonna suddenly pop out with a "Huge Surprise" right? Is it pure yuri, or should I be worried?
Not all of them are addressed in a more detailed way, they are presented and developed before, none of them simply appear and already have relationships with the protagonist. It's not pure Yuri since the Protagonist loves a male character but she loves more girls and there is only one male character she likes.
gotcha, so basically not my thing then...
It's not like I'm hiding it.
never said you were, thanks for answering
You are welcome! I always try to answer any questions.
bro will there be male character in her harem
Yes, my initial plan is 1 man and the rest will be girls. However, the Harem is not huge since the focus of the work is not Harem so much that it does not even have the Harem tag and the protagonist had more individual time with them than group time because this way each one is well developed.
Pancake. Even if there is no tag about it, you could at least write in the description of the novel at the bottom that the main character is bisexual. I just came for Yuri. Besides, for some reason, I really don't like bisexuals... But this is personal, I understand. It's just that if I hadn't accidentally seen a note about it in chapter 13, it would have been very embarrassing when I got involved in a novel to quit because of it. The truth is that you need to read the comments all the time before starting a novel, this time I forgot...
It may seem insulting (I'm not trying to insult), but there is an auxiliary chapter with a lot of things written, from how the work is extremely dark to the fact that it contains Yuri and Bisexual content. But I understand, not everyone likes it, especially Yuri fans, since having an invader in the lily garden is uncomfortable for many, if you know what I mean (¬‿¬) Thank you for trying to read the work :) and I recommend checking out other works or future content. (If you liked my writing, you might enjoy a future project I plan to release that will be totally Yuri, although this work will take a little while.)
*Facepalm* God. Thank you for responding appropriately to my outright stupidity. It's just that not all novels have additional chapters like this, and when they do, it's often just power ratings or something like that, so I probably stopped paying attention to it. And since it skips them when you click "read", I didn't see them this time either. It's probably quite disturbing that if it weren't for the invader, there wouldn't be anything in this book that would bother me, but everyone has a different state of mind and strange extremes and detachment from the other... For example, I have a latent tendency to be possessive, which affects the novels I read and my antipathy to polyamory, as well as my "separate diet," which is probably why I don't like bisexuals, because I like both separately, but not together...
It's okay I understand you, speaking like that I think I would like a future work 100% pure Yuri that I will do, but it will take a while so I don't even know if you will see it... A pity, I wish you luck in your search for the novels with you. :)
