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Small_PersonLv25mth
2024-11-25 14:18

Really good in my opinion. But could be better with more action with Draco. To future readers. This author writes more about background character building up the scene for the big fight. Which honestly is my favorite. There OC are definitively different from others. You also get world building. Draco though, to me doesn't seem to have much of an emotional pursue yet. Hoping that he soon does. His updates are pretty decent. Grammar gets way better after the first few chapter. Author says he start using Grammarly and has a proof reader for better flow. Good luck author. Same to the proof reader.

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