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Funnypilz
FunnypilzLv152mth
2024-10-10 02:03

Generally good quality writing, sometimes in my opinion to descriptive even, some expressions are used a little to often and feel repetetive. Flow of the Story i got nothing to complain about so far. The main Issue i have with this book is that Characters behave uncharacteristically, its mainly seen in Ei and her Squad, they don't talk like 4-6 Yo's even if they would act older than their age, its very unfitting, for Ei you can ofcourse always argue that its from her life, but she also often Talks very "swollen" basically doing speeches using big words, noone would ever talk like that in a conversation. Another plothole beeing why Ei has such a strong conviction, to train as hard, not wasting her 2nd Chance is nice but she is basically torturing herself, she would need some kind of tragic backstory or upcoming disaster she needs to be strong enough for to explain her determination. Overall still a solid read.

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Israfil
IsrafilAuthor

There is 2 reason for Ei and the children act with such conviction and why Yugito, Samui and Mabui emotional growth is strong : 1. Will of Lightning : Might makes right, the stronger you are the better respect you get. 2. For Ei, it's the memories. Especially Acheron from Honkai Star Rail.

Funnypilz
FunnypilzLv15

Will of lightning may raise their conviction but it won't raise their maturity afaik right? Concerning Ei: I am not very familiar with Honkai Star Rail and iIdont think her actually being from Honkai Star Rail was explained? At least i don't remember reading it, my takeaway was that she had a past life in a modern world, nothing much is known about it and she gets reincarnated. If you did indeed explain that and I missed it it's my bad I guess.

GnomePatty
GnomePattyLv4

hey, I just want to ask if there is any romance if there is. Can it be yuri or no?

Israfil:There is 2 reason for Ei and the children act with such conviction and why Yugito, Samui and Mabui emotional growth is strong : 1. Will of Lightning : Might makes right, the stronger you are the better respect you get. 2. For Ei, it's the memories. Especially Acheron from Honkai Star Rail.
Israfil
IsrafilAuthor

to be honest, it depend on my mood. I never tried to write something like romance, I don't want to screw up my story with adding romance. So, if you guys can give me a reference for a serious and a bit dark fanfic with female MC and have Yuri tag. Please give it to me the title. I'll read it after my midterm exam

GnomePatty:hey, I just want to ask if there is any romance if there is. Can it be yuri or no?
GnomePatty
GnomePattyLv4

rwby the madness of lappland if you don't have any experience writing romance, I wouldn't recommend it, in my opinion, but it's your choice. I love the novel, Btw ❤️

Israfil:to be honest, it depend on my mood. I never tried to write something like romance, I don't want to screw up my story with adding romance. So, if you guys can give me a reference for a serious and a bit dark fanfic with female MC and have Yuri tag. Please give it to me the title. I'll read it after my midterm exam
Israfil
IsrafilAuthor

I'll read it after I'm done with my midterm exams.

GnomePatty:rwby the madness of lappland if you don't have any experience writing romance, I wouldn't recommend it, in my opinion, but it's your choice. I love the novel, Btw ❤️
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