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EdgeLord_23
EdgeLord_23Lv136mth
2024-11-03 00:32

Great idea/picture you are trying to build. I love the characters and the powers they are getting, and thinking of what characters would do with their abilities is exciting. But this story loses when it comes to development, everything seems rushed. And loses a lot of the tension in characters developing an ability slowly and starting of mid and getting better as the story develops. I have a lot of hope for this fanfic and that it would be great if author decides to further expand it. So far enjoying the creativity, thanks👌

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thanks for valuable feed back

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