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2024-10-03 20:17

just 4 ch and I am hooked to this story keep it up author

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Thanks, Just need my dear readers' support and ofc don't forget to point out any mistakes and comment with your suggestions.😁

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Let me go over one by one. Writing Quality had become great. I read and reviewed one of the author's previous books and from there, his writing quality has jumped way higher. There are no Grammer mistakes, at least none I could catch. There is a bit too much exposition sometimes, like explaining the customs of the land and their significance along with describing the reactions of the supporting main leads a bit too extensively. The first is needed in all respects lest the readers feel alienated but the latter could have been toned down just a bit, but that's just my opinion. Story Development so far is great. The author really catches your attention and doesn't let go. me, personally, I didn't like the addition of the harem from Greek mythology but that's just my personal preference. I do feel that it was revealed too soon, but then again, revealing it too late might have led to the readers growing attached to Draupadi only. Characters are all dynamic and serve their own purpose. Especially the character of Krishna was so beautifully added. I do have some bias about the way the author underlines the Dynamic between the Kauravas and the Pandavas though. In a lot of literary and TV media, you always see the authors or the directors take a side and support a particular group and the author does the same and supports the Kauravas. But there stands to reason that no one in the Mahabharata is actually a good character. They're certainly not bad as they are followers of Dharma, but they are evil in a way that does not violate the Dharma of that age and that has been beautifully underlined in the original Epic. But then again, these are all creative choices and the author writes the characters beautifully. Update Stablility is great. World Background instantly gets a five star since the work it's trying to adapt is so expansive and complex by itself. it can make way for a lot of interesting philosophical and narrative moments. and the existence of other myths only aids to that. Wish you well author! keep writing!

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