Okay I feel the fic might get better later on but as of now its hard to stay focused reading it.
Nothing attracts the readers attention so far we go from the kuoh notes to him fighting, With no information how or why he started doing the fighting(Could've missed it as i was trying to skip the boxing or mma whatever he's doing as i feel no attchment to the mc.)
other than that i think the story fine might come back to read later on idk
How and why are explained in the 2nd chapter, I get what you mean with nothing attracting the attention of the reader. I've thought about rewriting the first few chapters but decided not to, I see it as the growth of the mc and the growth as a writer.
Have an awesome October
ACHILLESLv4
Thank u
but you saying character developement, i currently read to ch 12 but i will make it simple im not an fan of the mc at all, (personality), and his strangth/power its just not,
idk how to say it. Appealing or unique and seems rather lame and his personality doesn't make it any better. Normally an author can make an story more enjoyable with an great Mc.
While This character makes it worse or does nothing for the story,(Improving the story or making us like the mc till the point we still stick around even with him being weak/plain) lmk if it gets better he's seems too childish as of now. Best of Luck to u2
Happy october
MeatBeef:How and why are explained in the 2nd chapter, I get what you mean with nothing attracting the attention of the reader. I've thought about rewriting the first few chapters but decided not to, I see it as the growth of the mc and the growth as a writer.
Have an awesome October