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TranshumanistLv143mth
2024-10-17 04:43

The story feels bloated filled with redundant and overly descriptive words, reading this makes my head go dizzy. I bet nearly 3/4ths of the story is filler words added by an AI.

Asoiaf: I Have a Wolverine Template

Ninja_King_3834
4.5
67 Chs

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Ninja_King_3834
Ninja_King_3834Author

Thanks for the review. The beginning chapters are the hardest to get through. But the story move quickly on after chapter 5. It’s a shame you stopped at chapter 5, the novel picks up speed after this.

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ScarletQC
ScarletQCLv14

Easy, rewrite them.

Ninja_King_3834:Thanks for the review. The beginning chapters are the hardest to get through. But the story move quickly on after chapter 5. It’s a shame you stopped at chapter 5, the novel picks up speed after this.
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Ninja_King_3834
Ninja_King_3834Author

I already rewrite chapter 1 and 2. But for 3 to 5, it’s still in progress.

ScarletQC:Easy, rewrite them.
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EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

Why do you think it's AI if it's a good novel?

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EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

Also do you know what filler words are? Filler words so far in this novel their hasn't been many or any I'm a bit disappointed in your review maybe you just hate long chapters with realism

2mth
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EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

I think you did good and the chapter length was good and their didn't seem any wasted words or filler words. I don't think this person understood what filler words are... as everything you used was useful and not overused and every descriptive word added something to the story, either this person failed English or he simply doesn't know what filler words are.

Ninja_King_3834:I already rewrite chapter 1 and 2. But for 3 to 5, it’s still in progress.
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EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

For reference my comment had filler words in it but I don't think he will understand that.

EyeOfSilver:I think you did good and the chapter length was good and their didn't seem any wasted words or filler words. I don't think this person understood what filler words are... as everything you used was useful and not overused and every descriptive word added something to the story, either this person failed English or he simply doesn't know what filler words are.
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Sir_Leirkazz
Sir_LeirkazzLv13

(Read up to CH 5) 😒

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T_Smith_7285
T_Smith_7285Lv15

This story has potential. The Wolverine and his X-men.

4mth

MadFool
MadFoolLv15

So far so good. The MC has a "transmigration benefit" that does not completely break the power balance of ASOIAF world. Mc is relatively smart and ruthless, but has clear boundaries that he doesn't cross. Start has been promising so I hope the quality doesn't drop but so far plot hasn't progressed much so it's too early to tell.

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The_Jagger_
The_Jagger_Lv11

To start off, I'll say that I'm writing this while I'm in the middle of work, because I can't get your story out of my head, so that's a sign of its quality. Before I go with a review I'll say it's a silly thing out of frustration that there are less than 100 chapters instead of 500 as I would like. AUTHOR! GIVE ME MORE CHAPTERS AND MY LIFE IS YOURS!. After this silly thing I'll go with the actual review: The first chapters are too influenced by AI, but the author read the comments and fixed it and that improved the story to the point that I don't remember if it was just the first chapter or it was 5, but no matter the quality of the story improved enormously. Let's talk about the MC, when I saw the story I thought it would be the typical cliché, a protagonist dies and reincarnates in the body of a native, but the author did something really surprising for any fanfic. He did something original. The soul of the earth dweller that should inhabit the MC's body (an obese, useless, and disgustingly perverted guy) is consumed, giving him memories of Wolverine's plot and template. Just the fact that he didn't make another Mushoku tensei made the story 100% better, a lot of people treasure that story, but Rudeus' character is so unpleasant in many ways that it makes me unable to enjoy it. Leaving that aside, the MC gains Wolverine's abilities, and let me tell you, in a setting like Game of Thrones, not only does it make it OP, but it's tremendously convenient (in a good way), it's incredible how the author develops the protagonist's criminal empire, very Godfather-esque and damn, you look REALLY good, it's intriguing, interesting, and very entertaining. The romance is just beginning, but it's clear that the character will aspire to at least two wives and I hope it ends there, because I like Daenerys, the harem is so cliché in these stories that it's already boring, so if the author is hesitating about doing it, the answer is probably no. To sum up, a story that's just beginning but has incredible potential, very well written, with an original plot (for an asoiaf fanfic) and deep and interesting characters.

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STEVIOL_GLY
STEVIOL_GLYLv4

idk if author deletes the negative reviews, but i only see outstanding reviews on a mediocre AI infested story.... the commentson eqch chapter are over the top, saying this is the best intro and yada yada, when nothing original has been introduced besides the eight year old alicent having a phd in shakespearean english so to speak

4mth
1day
1dayLv3

I’m dropping this story because the author first develops romantic stories (Cersei, Elia), and then I’m sorry, I love my childhood friend. The question is why did you do this then, you spent many chapters developing romantic relationships, so that you could then say I love only one? And this is not a pretension that I want a harem, no, but why develop a relationship in order to abandon them like that. As for me, it’s terrible, I didn’t give 1 on everything only because the story really interested me, the beginning and the future process are super. But I'm sorry, I'm dropping this. Whoever reads to the last chapter at the moment, and this is 54, will probably understand that if not, it means we have different views. Very disappointed, I gave stones every day to get this ((((

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Gd_Sys
Gd_SysLv4

Moreeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

4mth
Iseeyou
IseeyouLv15

Not bad but AI never the less so all it deserves is a two or three star at most

3mth
Aldrighi
AldrighiLv14

Was surprised by how good the story is. If you are in doubt i suggest you read it because it is very much worth it.

4mth
JjhonRhayy_101
JjhonRhayy_101Lv4

This a lot more easy to read than the other asoiaf fanfic here, and the story development is looking good for the start. Keep it up author-san his abilities is also interesting probably give him a talent for swordsmanship too. Overall this is highly recommend !!!

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