There are a lot of problems with the novel. 1- there are a lot of logical loopholes, for example when he pushes everyone out of the classroom and locks himself inside with a criminal for no good reason, and he has time to write a whole note to his family instead of escaping .2-the story jumps around and keeps skipping from scene to scene with no consistency, you see him in class one time and then suddenly he's in the theater singing and playing the piano and then in the parking lot. I'm not sure what exactly is going on here and I don't want to know .3- why the hell is Mr. Bertie teaching him? He's supposed to be 13 and Mr. Bertie is a high school teacher .4- this guy barely spent a day after his reincarnation and started flirting and singing on stage instead of grieving about his passing and what happened to his family in his previous life. 5- I'm pretty sure he supposed to sign up for a competition before it even started bye a couple of days. I want stay more than my welcome so goodbye
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Wow… just wow.. shitty comment. He was just giving constructive criticism
ok and? he decided to leave, nonsense. did u not read?
bro when are you going to update Twilight: Gods among us chap 26
Sorry, but I’m not the author if you want to speak with him you should click on his comment before writing your comment so the message goes to him instead of me
that's not nonsense it's criticism
I don't see any problem tho evrything is fun to read ... little bit funny scene...here and there would be great....too ........ actualy there is a problem...that is ...the chapter update is ...to ...slow....i like reading....fan fic with... atleast...300 up chapters....and Hello to the writer guy ...tnks for the fic tho ..... waiting for more chapters....
