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Okay, now I’m a bit confused. This guy has Ultimate Comprehension. How does that translate into doubling his chakra or improving his five senses? His talent should be called Talent Generation instead of Ultimate Comprehension.

Didn’t this guy have barely 100,000 credit even after his harvest of bodies

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Mate, you really need to work on your pacing and there is multiple logical hole based on the original story.

I can see that, but you can ask the AI to add an accent, choose the dialect or tone you want, and tell it to make the writing feel more human. That would solve the problem. I could also do that with my reviews, but honestly, I don’t care that much since it isn’t a story. Still, I can see your point. Most people are too lazy to actually write anything. They just give the AI the structure of the story and ask it to fill in the rest.

Okay, I’ll be honest here: if you are a serious Warhammer fan, you might not like this novel simply because it is too outlandish. Now, as for the reason I’m dropping it and why I’m no longer interested—first and foremost, three-quarters of the chapter is literally just a status panel. It became annoying to read. Not only that, but I feel like the crescendo of the story already reached its peak at the beginning. At first, you could see the protagonist struggling to make equipment, craft weapons, and improve bit by bit, but right now he can roll through almost anything simply by virtue of being a gamer. Yeah, I understand that this is the intended outcome of the story, but that doesn’t make it any less boring. When everything comes easily to the protagonist, it reduces any enjoyment I might still have had in the story.

Well mate, first and foremost, English isn’t my first language. I can write and read it, but if I want to create an accurate and correct sentence, it will take me a while, especially when I’m writing a review. Just to make sure the sentence structure is correct, I might spend 10 to 15 minutes going over my review, and honestly, AI can do it in less than a second, so why not use it? I actually have no problem with people using AI. What I don’t encourage is using AI to create a story from scratch. You can use it for grammar, spelling, and sentence structure correction—I have no problem with that. I actually encourage it because it makes the story easier and more readable. This also applies to my reviews. But if you’re going to start from scratch and use AI as the actual author, then I have a problem with that. That’s my stance on this subject, as you can see from my review and from my reply to you right now. Yes, I’m using AI to correct grammar, sentence structure, and spelling mistakes. I could go through my review and correct every grammar mistake, spelling mistake, and sentence structure issue myself, but it would take time, and honestly, I’m too lazy to do it. So yeah, I’m using AI.

Okay, this is obviously an AI-generated story, because most people—and I mean most authors—use transparent writing. Only a rare few use purple prose (when it’s overdone). Transparent writing is writing through momentum, where instead of something like “a couch that survived several administrations and is intended to survive several more,” most actual human writers would say “an old couch with traces of wear on it,” and then continue with the story. The first example is one of the most hated types of writing, and I’m one of those people who hate it. Until now, people still don’t know how to make AI write in a transparent style instead of this purple prose (when it’s overdone). To make it easier to understand: it’s like someone keeps pausing the movie to explain the furniture.

Too much AI flowery language

Yeah, all the tension in the story disappeared at this point. Honestly, I’m starting to lose interest. Extending the curse’s duration removes any real tension, and it also makes the situation feel far less urgent. Before, the curse felt like a serious, time-sensitive problem. Now it feels like he can just ignore it and live normally until he’s 68, which makes me question its purpose. If it’s no longer a real threat, why keep it in the story? At this point, it just feels like background noise.