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DaoMaster_Aizen35
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2024-09-03 16:40

Bro, I got to be honest the conversation between character is kind a bland and the whole angle explaining the talent of mc thing was unnecessary. The English needs slight improvement though it is understandable , it ruins the immersion I will give it a try again if story improves

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DaoMaster_Aizen35Lv3

update this pure garbage the time line is messed up, regulus leaves mc is askaban with sirius, mc fends off dementors at 4 months old

YATOOO
YATOOOAuthor

You are right in every point ، I have no idea the basics of writing my language is not very good, I wrote the novel a long time ago for fun. There are already 90 chapters. I intended to review and purify the chapters and correct all the stupid mistakes I made, but unfortunately I don't have time for that،So I'm just going to publish them and maybe rewrite later.

DaoMaster_Aizen35
DaoMaster_Aizen35Lv3

Well at least you are honest and did not straight up delete my comment, The novel really has potential but I like the idea of weak to strong more, if I have to give idea make mc reside in a muggle orphanage if near privet drive it would be better, make mc have experiences which evolves him to smart and give him reason to grow stronger other than moldyshorts

YATOOO:You are right in every point ، I have no idea the basics of writing my language is not very good, I wrote the novel a long time ago for fun. There are already 90 chapters. I intended to review and purify the chapters and correct all the stupid mistakes I made, but unfortunately I don't have time for that،So I'm just going to publish them and maybe rewrite later.
YATOOO
YATOOOAuthor

I actually wrote a manuscript with a similar script far from the well-known clichés, but it was really difficult, and after the first and second year manuscript, I didn't know how it continued so I gave up, maybe I would come back if I got inspiration and time،I say this a lot, but I never come back😔😔.

DaoMaster_Aizen35:Well at least you are honest and did not straight up delete my comment, The novel really has potential but I like the idea of weak to strong more, if I have to give idea make mc reside in a muggle orphanage if near privet drive it would be better, make mc have experiences which evolves him to smart and give him reason to grow stronger other than moldyshorts
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DaoMaster_Aizen35Lv3

If I have to say is just continue to write even if you don't get views it will improve your work many authors on webnovel have taken brakes off many months anf after months of hiatus they come back with improved plot and writing ability for example the author of naruto wind calamity and dragon ball alternative

YATOOO:I actually wrote a manuscript with a similar script far from the well-known clichés, but it was really difficult, and after the first and second year manuscript, I didn't know how it continued so I gave up, maybe I would come back if I got inspiration and time،I say this a lot, but I never come back😔😔.
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