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First, thank you for the rating and for taking the time to share your thoughts. Feedback like yours is genuinely useful, and I mean that. If I read you correctly, you want the MC to stand out through raw power or a system, not just foreknowledge. And I get it. We all went through that phase, right? First few hundred chapters of a cultivation novel, the MC crushes everything, levels up every arc. It hits different when you're new to the genre. But after a while, it becomes the same dish with a different garnish. Tastes differ, though, and I respect that completely. Here is where I will say this: Rhaenyra will develop certain abilities and touch on the magic that exists in this world. Things will get more interesting on that front. But she is never going to be Voldemort. Her sharpest weapon will always be her mind and her foreknowledge. And here is the catch: that foreknowledge will not last forever. She knows the people, their motives, their weaknesses. But events? Those will start drifting. Once enough changes, the show and the books become useless to her, and she is on her own. Hope that earns back at least half a star. If you have more thoughts, I am always happy to discuss.
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Thank you for your comments. I’ll revise Chapter 1 and make sure to avoid these errors in future chapters.
Yes! You can check it out here:[patreon.YATOOOO] If you want more chapters of this one specifically, I'll be uploading 20 advanced chapters there soon
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