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2024-09-02 02:30

It's a good fanfic, but the way I see it, it's more like a draft. It would be great if the story could be a lot more refined. Mc past / past abilities don't make sense, the mc's system was "explained", but tbh normal simulation would be thousand times better for this fanfic (the system contains different kinds of simulation functions that are not even used). Also the author introduces vilain points out of nowhere - this gives me the impression that author can give mc random system functions at any point in time, even though his system is already way beyond op. Also - mc can't be hurt in any way, he is ice logia in a ninja world after all...

Life Simulation: Propose Marriage To Kushina Uzumaki at the Beginning

MrBlackWing
4.7
226 Chs

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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

Great review, refined and with an excellent evaluative proposal. Worthy of a gentleman. Unfortunately, regarding the circumstances you mentioned, I can't do much more than blame the author himself. I'm just a translator. And believe me when I say it would be even worse if I just translated it and sent it as is. It's an even worse mess, believe me. As a fellow author, I could fix this, but... I really don't want to. 😂😂 I like the book the way it's going.

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PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

MC ask Kushina to marry him in reality or in the 'simulation'?

MrBlackWing:Great review, refined and with an excellent evaluative proposal. Worthy of a gentleman. Unfortunately, regarding the circumstances you mentioned, I can't do much more than blame the author himself. I'm just a translator. And believe me when I say it would be even worse if I just translated it and sent it as is. It's an even worse mess, believe me. As a fellow author, I could fix this, but... I really don't want to. 😂😂 I like the book the way it's going.
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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

In the simulation. All that happens between [] is the system talking or is a simulation going on.

PsyLoRD:MC ask Kushina to marry him in reality or in the 'simulation'?
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PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

MrBlackWing:In the simulation. All that happens between [] is the system talking or is a simulation going on.
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Xilt
XiltLv3

did you drop your op ff?

MrBlackWing:In the simulation. All that happens between [] is the system talking or is a simulation going on.
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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

I'm really trying. Every day I go to chapter 56 and try to write, but I can never immerse myself in the story like I used to. Not to mention that I don't have creative freedom since I work 8 hours a day, 6 days a week. The pressure is huge. But I didn't give up on it, it's a very good story and I really want to know how it will unfold.

Xilt:did you drop your op ff?
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absolue
absolueLv13

MrBlackWing can you just confirm that there is no ntr and yuri in this ff? I hate that degusting sh**

MrBlackWing:Great review, refined and with an excellent evaluative proposal. Worthy of a gentleman. Unfortunately, regarding the circumstances you mentioned, I can't do much more than blame the author himself. I'm just a translator. And believe me when I say it would be even worse if I just translated it and sent it as is. It's an even worse mess, believe me. As a fellow author, I could fix this, but... I really don't want to. 😂😂 I like the book the way it's going.
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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

If you consider that Kushina was starting a relationship with Minato (Nothing sexual had happened yet), and the MC came and stole her, then there may have been a slight trace of NTR. There is emotional manipulation, I won't deny it. BUT until the moment I'm translating, the MC hasn't done anything with her, just using her to gain more power (through his somewhat villainous system). And no Yuri till the moment, just a slight trace of it in a Smut chapter (that I wrote) of the Third Simulation, for those who like it.

absolue:MrBlackWing can you just confirm that there is no ntr and yuri in this ff? I hate that degusting sh**
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absolue
absolueLv13

Netori is good. But I hate yuri in yuri, these like partner sharing or ntr, plus impossible that heroines suddenly become l*sb***

MrBlackWing:If you consider that Kushina was starting a relationship with Minato (Nothing sexual had happened yet), and the MC came and stole her, then there may have been a slight trace of NTR. There is emotional manipulation, I won't deny it. BUT until the moment I'm translating, the MC hasn't done anything with her, just using her to gain more power (through his somewhat villainous system). And no Yuri till the moment, just a slight trace of it in a Smut chapter (that I wrote) of the Third Simulation, for those who like it.
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absolue
absolueLv13

Well, I hope there won't be any yuri waste, I hate anything that's partner-shared, and I already have your p-atreon

MrBlackWing:If you consider that Kushina was starting a relationship with Minato (Nothing sexual had happened yet), and the MC came and stole her, then there may have been a slight trace of NTR. There is emotional manipulation, I won't deny it. BUT until the moment I'm translating, the MC hasn't done anything with her, just using her to gain more power (through his somewhat villainous system). And no Yuri till the moment, just a slight trace of it in a Smut chapter (that I wrote) of the Third Simulation, for those who like it.
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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

As I said, there was only a trace of Yuri in that Smut chapter, and it was still with unnamed tertiary characters, just a mention. Don't worry, I'll try to avoid this as the "main course" of any smut, but I can't guarantee that there won't be any mention of it among tertiary characters (that if they cease to exist, no one really cares).

absolue:Well, I hope there won't be any yuri waste, I hate anything that's partner-shared, and I already have your p-atreon
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absolue
absolueLv13

Eh as long as it's not in the harem, it's ok otherwise it's just partner sharing, thanks for the answers. 👌

MrBlackWing:As I said, there was only a trace of Yuri in that Smut chapter, and it was still with unnamed tertiary characters, just a mention. Don't worry, I'll try to avoid this as the "main course" of any smut, but I can't guarantee that there won't be any mention of it among tertiary characters (that if they cease to exist, no one really cares).
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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

absolue:Eh as long as it's not in the harem, it's ok otherwise it's just partner sharing, thanks for the answers. 👌
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Rheizz
RheizzLv14

mate is this novel harem or not?

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MrBlackWing
MrBlackWingAuthor

Rheizz:mate is this novel harem or not?
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This is well translated, but the plot is not really my cup of tea, first of all, a good portion of this story, the protagonist’s beginning in this world is glossed over by starting us off at a point where he is powerful enough to beat Yagura and is already in an relationship with Mei, that takes almost all the stakes away from this story and we hadn’t even seen a simulation at that point. After that, we finally see the first simulation of the story and it’s in Konoha, like the description said, he gets into a relationship with Kushina in the simulation, which is fine, but Minato is weirdly mischaracterised here. He’s overly obsessive, and is in love with Kushina immediately while also being antagonistic to the protagonist, that just feels really out of character for someone who’s always depicted as a chill nice person. The protagonist and Minato both aren’t really likeable to me here and the randomness of a villain points addition doesn’t help. All that together doesn’t make it my cup of tea, but if you’re into a villain protagonist, you’d probably like this story.

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This book feels like a wet dream of a chinese retard. No hate for the Translator as I am sure he did a lot of work to make this more readable, in it's OG raw translated form, I might have dropped it on Ch 10 or earlier lol

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PARA SER UNA TRADUCION, ESTA HACIENDO UNA MUY BUEN TRABAJO, ADEMAS DE QUE TE RESERVAS EL PODER DE EDITAR Y CREAR NUEVO CONTENIDO A PARTIR DE LO QUE TRADUCES. TENGO FULL ESPERANZA DE ESTE FAN FIC.

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sinceramente ya me aburrió, si me digieras que las corrompe y terminan haciendo las cosas de buena gana, eso seria un desarrollo interesante pero hasta ahora solo vi al MC repetir una y otra ves la misma táctica y me aburrió completamente. El MC es se puede describir como alguien que solo sabe hacer una solo cosa

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