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R0BLv25mth
2024-09-01 18:30

It's a good fanfic, but the way I see it, it's more like a draft. It would be great if the story could be a lot more refined. Mc past / past abilities don't make sense, the mc's system was "explained", but tbh normal simulation would be thousand times better for this fanfic (the system contains different kinds of simulation functions that are not even used). Also the author introduces vilain points out of nowhere - this gives me the impression that author can give mc random system functions at any point in time, even though his system is already way beyond op. Also - mc can't be hurt in any way, he is ice logia in a ninja world after all...

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MrBlackWingAuthor

Great review, refined and with an excellent evaluative proposal. Worthy of a gentleman. Unfortunately, regarding the circumstances you mentioned, I can't do much more than blame the author himself. I'm just a translator. And believe me when I say it would be even worse if I just translated it and sent it as is. It's an even worse mess, believe me. As a fellow author, I could fix this, but... I really don't want to. 😂😂 I like the book the way it's going.

PsyLoRDLv5

MC ask Kushina to marry him in reality or in the 'simulation'?

MrBlackWing:Great review, refined and with an excellent evaluative proposal. Worthy of a gentleman. Unfortunately, regarding the circumstances you mentioned, I can't do much more than blame the author himself. I'm just a translator. And believe me when I say it would be even worse if I just translated it and sent it as is. It's an even worse mess, believe me. As a fellow author, I could fix this, but... I really don't want to. 😂😂 I like the book the way it's going.
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MrBlackWingAuthor

In the simulation. All that happens between [] is the system talking or is a simulation going on.

PsyLoRD:MC ask Kushina to marry him in reality or in the 'simulation'?
PsyLoRDLv5

MrBlackWing:In the simulation. All that happens between [] is the system talking or is a simulation going on.
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XiltLv3

did you drop your op ff?

MrBlackWing:In the simulation. All that happens between [] is the system talking or is a simulation going on.
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MrBlackWingAuthor

I'm really trying. Every day I go to chapter 56 and try to write, but I can never immerse myself in the story like I used to. Not to mention that I don't have creative freedom since I work 8 hours a day, 6 days a week. The pressure is huge. But I didn't give up on it, it's a very good story and I really want to know how it will unfold.

Xilt:did you drop your op ff?
absolueLv13

MrBlackWing can you just confirm that there is no ntr and yuri in this ff? I hate that degusting sh**

MrBlackWing:Great review, refined and with an excellent evaluative proposal. Worthy of a gentleman. Unfortunately, regarding the circumstances you mentioned, I can't do much more than blame the author himself. I'm just a translator. And believe me when I say it would be even worse if I just translated it and sent it as is. It's an even worse mess, believe me. As a fellow author, I could fix this, but... I really don't want to. 😂😂 I like the book the way it's going.
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MrBlackWingAuthor

If you consider that Kushina was starting a relationship with Minato (Nothing sexual had happened yet), and the MC came and stole her, then there may have been a slight trace of NTR. There is emotional manipulation, I won't deny it. BUT until the moment I'm translating, the MC hasn't done anything with her, just using her to gain more power (through his somewhat villainous system). And no Yuri till the moment, just a slight trace of it in a Smut chapter (that I wrote) of the Third Simulation, for those who like it.

absolue:MrBlackWing can you just confirm that there is no ntr and yuri in this ff? I hate that degusting sh**
absolueLv13

Netori is good. But I hate yuri in yuri, these like partner sharing or ntr, plus impossible that heroines suddenly become l*sb***

MrBlackWing:If you consider that Kushina was starting a relationship with Minato (Nothing sexual had happened yet), and the MC came and stole her, then there may have been a slight trace of NTR. There is emotional manipulation, I won't deny it. BUT until the moment I'm translating, the MC hasn't done anything with her, just using her to gain more power (through his somewhat villainous system). And no Yuri till the moment, just a slight trace of it in a Smut chapter (that I wrote) of the Third Simulation, for those who like it.
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absolueLv13

Well, I hope there won't be any yuri waste, I hate anything that's partner-shared, and I already have your p-atreon

MrBlackWing:If you consider that Kushina was starting a relationship with Minato (Nothing sexual had happened yet), and the MC came and stole her, then there may have been a slight trace of NTR. There is emotional manipulation, I won't deny it. BUT until the moment I'm translating, the MC hasn't done anything with her, just using her to gain more power (through his somewhat villainous system). And no Yuri till the moment, just a slight trace of it in a Smut chapter (that I wrote) of the Third Simulation, for those who like it.
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MrBlackWingAuthor

As I said, there was only a trace of Yuri in that Smut chapter, and it was still with unnamed tertiary characters, just a mention. Don't worry, I'll try to avoid this as the "main course" of any smut, but I can't guarantee that there won't be any mention of it among tertiary characters (that if they cease to exist, no one really cares).

absolue:Well, I hope there won't be any yuri waste, I hate anything that's partner-shared, and I already have your p-atreon
absolueLv13

Eh as long as it's not in the harem, it's ok otherwise it's just partner sharing, thanks for the answers. 👌

MrBlackWing:As I said, there was only a trace of Yuri in that Smut chapter, and it was still with unnamed tertiary characters, just a mention. Don't worry, I'll try to avoid this as the "main course" of any smut, but I can't guarantee that there won't be any mention of it among tertiary characters (that if they cease to exist, no one really cares).
MrBlackWingAuthor

absolue:Eh as long as it's not in the harem, it's ok otherwise it's just partner sharing, thanks for the answers. 👌
RheizzLv14

mate is this novel harem or not?

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MrBlackWingAuthor

Rheizz:mate is this novel harem or not?
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