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2024-09-13 10:58

This is a review from a reader who watched the anime and read the manga and part of the light novel. I have read all twenty chapters of this work so far, and the first thing is to congratulate the author for creating what is possibly the best Mushoku Tensei novel ever seen on this platform known as Web Novel. The next thing is to write about grammar, which is one of the strong points of this story. The way this author writes is very fluid, which makes reading enjoyable. At no point do I feel like I have to stop to take a break or get a headache trying to read what is written. Along with this, the length of the chapters is acceptable, neither too short nor too long, which is a good point since it gives the reader time to absorb the information provided in each chapter and be able to read it again. As for the characters, apart from the protagonist Seraphim, I feel that they have been taken from the original work itself. At no point do they feel out of place or with forced interactions as happens in other mushoku tensei novels where they seem to lose brain capacity. Now if we talk about the protagonist of this story, Seraphim Greyrat, it is easy to see that he far surpasses Rudeus Greyrat. From the first moment he knows what he has to do and how to do it, with a great understanding of the world and its rules in order to reach the top. He does not waste the opportunities that are presented to him, he experiments with things that almost no reader or character had thought of before, and he is not as disgusting as the protagonist of the original work, which makes it not at all uncomfortable to read his reflections or thoughts like his counterpart. So far the story seems to follow the original route but don't let that fool you or bother you after all for both Rudeus and Seraphim this is one of the best starting points ever seen in isekai, they have a loving family, a father who is a knight swordsman with the 3 advanced sword styles, a mother who is an expert in healing magic, a maid dedicated to her job, textbooks that talk about magic and can teach you to understand the language of the new world, a little saint level magic tutor and connections with a noble family if this is still not enough I'm sure the author will follow his own route and surprise us with moves that nobody expected. This would be all for the moment, I will update my review from time to time, in the meantime I will continue reading this story until the day it ends.

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Thank you for the review. It flatters me a lot. The story might not be as perfect as described, but I'm trying to at least keep up the writing quality and make it as real as possible. I try hard to make what I write ‘good’. In general, the fanfiction is about a reader who is virtually in Rudeus’s shoes and uses his novel knowledge and wit to get the best advantages out of it, becoming ‘overpowered’ while what he does still stays grounded in reality without breaking the rules of the world’s magic system. He starts at nearly the same point as Rudeus, and then there is a spreading butterfly effect that grows larger over time. The first time that a major change happens is after 20 chapters, and then even more so at chapter 30. Going forward, the story will take a very different route from the original and will include more political machinations and world building aspects that were not well-developed in the novel and perhaps only touched upon in side stories and side mangas. At the very least, what can be expected from the Mana Disaster will be very different than in canon. However, the story is rather slow-paced and the MC’s thoughts on the magic system and discoveries are written at great lengths, so some people might not like his aspect. These are some words from the author.

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