It is well-written and the unique and well-researched abilities make it refreshing from the repetitive uchiha/senju OC you normally see. It makes me feel like there is a strong foundation for development with limitless potential, especially if you get creative. interested to see where it goes. I would say however that the beginning before the reincarnation is unnecessarily long and would most likely put some people off so it may be worth editing it and trimming it down in my opinion. A more relevant image and detailed synopsis would also go a long way ๐ซก keep up the good work Mr Author
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Thank you for your good suggestion. The beginning before the reincarnation was necessary as both the celestials called Mr.Beginning and Mr.End will play a minor role in the future. Also, I need some background work explaining the abilities of the main character. But you are right it was a bit long. You are also right about image and synopsis. Both needed some work. I hope you liked the story. It is my story and English is not my first language, so i apologise for my mistakes.
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PageTurnerPJ:Thank you for your good suggestion. The beginning before the reincarnation was necessary as both the celestials called Mr.Beginning and Mr.End will play a minor role in the future. Also, I need some background work explaining the abilities of the main character. But you are right it was a bit long. You are also right about image and synopsis. Both needed some work. I hope you liked the story. It is my story and English is not my first language, so i apologise for my mistakes.
