So far it's a great story. However the grammar is absolutely horrendous, very difficult to understand.
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this is where we different on opinion of horrendous are we talking kind of misspelling stuff here and not using grammar Nàzi approved exact dictionary terms horrendous or are we talking Chinese novel give you eye cancer trying to read it and make sure brain hurt horrendous because there's a massive difference
we talking about skipping parts, orden of sentences, ending sentences early then starting another one but with something that should have been in the middle of the last sentence, and as the guy from below said, there is a lot of thoughts just going randomly everywhere all at once and nowhere never. Its understandable but your head is going to hurt a lot and it's going to make you question reality. For example this part "To collect myself a weapon was art great, because to anticipate such a thing as a shot from a blaster was for me quite realistic. I was not weakling, but a normal boy with Yoda's strenght. Potentially. and such parameters gave me... "
