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Skahra
SkahraLv142mth
2024-09-20 12:12

It is definitely worth the read. Great story with a very interesting concept with a mishmash between historical, sci-fi, fantasy, and apocalyptic themes. The flirting and teasing have humor to them, which I do enjoy. Yes, in the description, it indeed does have Yuri. I love female-led novels, and I have nothing against Yuri, but it does get boring and repetitive after the majority of fantasy and action focused novels that have a female lead turn into Yuri, but that is just a complaint over webnovel as a whole and not this particular novel. The first night is quite slow and can drag on, but it still has an interesting and important development to the story. My only request is that chapters that include smut to be marked.

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Shin_Ou
Shin_OuAuthor

Thank you for the review! This is my first story written and I haven't read much of webnovel's fantasy/action/plot-focused with female lead, so I'm surprised that Yuri is very prevalent here. And thank you for the suggestion! From now on, all smüt chapter will be tagged for better reading experience.

PancakesWitch
PancakesWitchLv13

when you dont make it into yuri people tend to complain even more you know

DaoistYellowBird
DaoistYellowBirdLv14

It’s good so far, however I highly recommend an editor as I can see quite a few grammar mistakes i try to point out every now and then. I assume you’re not a native english speaker? It’s mostly easy fixes, mostly to help the flow

Shin_Ou:Thank you for the review! This is my first story written and I haven't read much of webnovel's fantasy/action/plot-focused with female lead, so I'm surprised that Yuri is very prevalent here. And thank you for the suggestion! From now on, all smüt chapter will be tagged for better reading experience.
Shin_Ou
Shin_OuAuthor

I'm glad that you found it not downright horrendous then! And yes, I'm not a native speaker and this is essentially my first time creating a story. Finding an editor that matches your schedule and willing to work everyday is a little hard in my case, but I do plan for a massive editing of the available chapters in the future.

DaoistYellowBird:It’s good so far, however I highly recommend an editor as I can see quite a few grammar mistakes i try to point out every now and then. I assume you’re not a native english speaker? It’s mostly easy fixes, mostly to help the flow
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