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Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv124mth
2024-07-31 10:10

3.8 stars My main criteria for rating a fic in general is to give 5 stars to everything that's a little below average and above, and take stars off based on how horrible, avoidable, or frustrating an issue is. The problems in this fic are all of the easily avoidable and somewhat frustrating kind. Translation Quality: 3 stars. Overall it's good, with the big problem being wrong terms like Falis instead of Valis or the author completely getting the name of an important place like Hostess of Fertility wrong. These are errors that are really frustrating because they are very basic, but they do not make reading impossible like MTL. Stability of Updates: 5 stars. More than one chapter per day (at the time of posting this review). Story Development: 3 Stars. 3 stars Again, overall it's good and interesting, but it lacks a lot in the details. I'm giving it 3 stars because although they are errors that don't affect the course of the story in general, they are very frustrating and the author doesn't bother to correct them even when a reader points out the error. Some more striking examples are the MC and his almost lvl 2 Familia suffering through a 30km marathon lasting 2 hours when the MC's training involved days of running non-stop from dawn to dusk through a mountain full of traps is simply ridiculous. This is without taking into account that a mundane athlete holds the world record of 42km in 2 hours, so even without training and breathing techniques a lvl 1 adventurer who spends the whole day fighting in the dungeon should be able to run a marathon effortlessly. The author also got several other details wrong, such as the comparison of Netero and Meruem's power levels in relation to an adventurer. Another mistake was calling In En and the MC knowing how to do this before even learning Nen. These are all basic details that do not affect the story in general but could also be easily avoided if the author bothered to do some minimal research or read reader comments pointing out these errors and then correcting them. Character Design: 5 stars. It's ok, nothing special, but nothing bad either and in fanfics my standard is to give 5 stars to everything that is acceptable and then take points off depending on how frustrating and simple a problem is. World Background: 3 stars. Again because of frustrating, easily avoidable errors that don't interfere that much with the story in general and that the author does not bother to correct even when readers point out. Conclusion: It's a good read with the caveat of extremely frustrating small problems, I recommend following this fic unless these problems are the kind of thing that makes you drop a fic.

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Yorgan
YorganLv12

Yo what is this? Someone who actually did write a real review on webnovel? Not a bot who keeps repeating the same thing over and over? Imagine how much better would be to read a pic/novel if we had more ppl like this dood here.

Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

just an advice, the name is not wrong, both of them are acceptable, be the one that you wrote or the one from the author which if from the LN

Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

(Regarding the hostess of fertility name)

Lintiun8:just an advice, the name is not wrong, both of them are acceptable, be the one that you wrote or the one from the author which if from the LN
Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

I understand where you're coming from, but it's been more or less confirmed that Hostess of Fertility is the official translation when the pub sign in the anime is basically Hostess of Fertility written in English with a different spelling. It is also the most used translation around the world.

Lintiun8:just an advice, the name is not wrong, both of them are acceptable, be the one that you wrote or the one from the author which if from the LN
Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

yeah, but it doesnt change the fact that using the other one is right too, there are no problems using it, the most used can be the principal one and the "official" but the other translation can be used too, it's not a right or wrong thing, its a matter of what is most used and translation, nothing wrong using the other

Spelloyal:I understand where you're coming from, but it's been more or less confirmed that Hostess of Fertility is the official translation when the pub sign in the anime is basically Hostess of Fertility written in English with a different spelling. It is also the most used translation around the world.
Arcguile_Renzig
Arcguile_RenzigLv14

This review was actually helpful and pretty accurate for once. The amount of meme/bot reviews on this platform is quite bad.

ChikinBorger
ChikinBorgerLv4

Those sound like pretty serious flaws. It’s like saying “everything is good except the structure of the worlds and the systems that govern them and the key details of their settings”. So, it would be a good story if the writer made an original setting instead of thoughtlessly bumbling through established series he couldn’t be bothered to learn about.

ChikinBorger
ChikinBorgerLv4

It literally means the other one is wrong. The official translation proves it.

Lintiun8:yeah, but it doesnt change the fact that using the other one is right too, there are no problems using it, the most used can be the principal one and the "official" but the other translation can be used too, it's not a right or wrong thing, its a matter of what is most used and translation, nothing wrong using the other
Lintiun8
Lintiun8Lv13

no, it doesnt.

ChikinBorger:It literally means the other one is wrong. The official translation proves it.
Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

You're not wrong if we compare it to novels in general, but when we restrict it to fanfiction things change. Just the fact that it has a real plot already puts this fic above most of what I've seen in the webnovel lately.

ChikinBorger:Those sound like pretty serious flaws. It’s like saying “everything is good except the structure of the worlds and the systems that govern them and the key details of their settings”. So, it would be a good story if the writer made an original setting instead of thoughtlessly bumbling through established series he couldn’t be bothered to learn about.
Deadrule_vivek
Deadrule_vivekLv5

What a nice review , you get 5 ⭐ for your review 👍

Taufiq_5099
Taufiq_5099Lv1

perfect review guys

Haku_Ouroboros
Haku_OuroborosLv11

MC is male or female ??? (Mika is a girl name and imagen proto Merlín)

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

MC is a guy, Proto Merlin is an Expy recruited into MC's Familia

Haku_Ouroboros:MC is male or female ??? (Mika is a girl name and imagen proto Merlín)
Haku_Ouroboros
Haku_OuroborosLv11

sad

Spelloyal:MC is a guy, Proto Merlin is an Expy recruited into MC's Familia
Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

I agree, but still a good fic to waste some time. If you are looking for fica with high quality the web novel isn't the right place. You can find a lot of fem mc at questionablequesting or spacebattles

Haku_Ouroboros:sad
King_Of_SpaceTime
King_Of_SpaceTimeLv14

neither of those are any good Both are Very Unfriendly to users One is a nightmare to sign up for and One is like 90 percent PersonAXPersonB love stories while the other has like 6000 Stories Total and you might need to spend Hours to find one your into

Spelloyal:I agree, but still a good fic to waste some time. If you are looking for fica with high quality the web novel isn't the right place. You can find a lot of fem mc at questionablequesting or spacebattles
Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

I disagree. Both were actually a bit annoying to find something good without browsing the tags, but much easier than on Webnovel which is currently flooded with MTL fics or just plain trash. Webnovel has simply fallen a lot in level, but even before these forums have always gotten better. I have to agree that they are not very user-friendly to new users who are not used to forums, but that is more a matter of getting used to a new format. However, while Webnovel has fallen in quality, both forums have actually improved. It is now easier to find new fics on QQ by searching for new tags and SB now has a ranking similar to that of Webnovel but much better since there are no questionable MTL fics in the ranking.

King_Of_SpaceTime:neither of those are any good Both are Very Unfriendly to users One is a nightmare to sign up for and One is like 90 percent PersonAXPersonB love stories while the other has like 6000 Stories Total and you might need to spend Hours to find one your into
Braian_Rodriguez
Braian_RodriguezLv1

Una pregunta, como calificarias a entero y meruen si los convirtieras en aventurero y monstruo, en mi opinión, entero sería un nivel 6, su habilidad es muy llamativa, con técnicas absurdas y romper la velocidad del sonido, pero esas habilidades no pudieron romper la defensa del rey hormiga, en cambio, meruen sería un nivel 7, una recuperación horrorosa, una letalidad absoluta, y una stamina inagotable, creo que requiere de al menos tres miembros top de la familia loki para talvez ganarle, después de todo, meruen no es un monstruo cualquiera, y aprende durante el combate, haciendo mas fuerte mientras pelea, creo que ottar incluso podria perder en solitario.

Spelloyal
SpelloyalLv12

Braian_Rodriguez:Una pregunta, como calificarias a entero y meruen si los convirtieras en aventurero y monstruo, en mi opinión, entero sería un nivel 6, su habilidad es muy llamativa, con técnicas absurdas y romper la velocidad del sonido, pero esas habilidades no pudieron romper la defensa del rey hormiga, en cambio, meruen sería un nivel 7, una recuperación horrorosa, una letalidad absoluta, y una stamina inagotable, creo que requiere de al menos tres miembros top de la familia loki para talvez ganarle, después de todo, meruen no es un monstruo cualquiera, y aprende durante el combate, haciendo mas fuerte mientras pelea, creo que ottar incluso podria perder en solitario.
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