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2024-11-28 21:26

4.4 2 stars on writing quality. This needs a rewrite. The most wordings were too AI-ish. It will break immersion when your brain tries to recorrect each words. Not too down the line as machine translations, but it really breaks your reading immersion with really deep wordings that seemed to be created by AI

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Interesting take but since you gave 2 stars on writing I owe you an explanation I believe. I saw ur para comments, expired was meant to serve as a euphemism for death. And yes predecessors does indeed sound unnatural there now that I reread it. I'll re-read the initial chaps and while at correct those faults. Will take a week or more since I'm travelling though. So until then it is what it is.

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