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aliciasLv29mth
2024-07-14 07:33

Honestly, I like the story, the problem I have is how it's written. It's very hard to read this. When someone talks try surrounding the text with " instead of adding an - in front of the message. But overall, I like the rest of it. Solid characters and world-building. I recommend this story if you re-write it.

A Broken Hearth Mistery

animanovalux
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Thank you for your suggestion, if it is going to be rewritten in the future, at the moment the story is originally written in Spanish and with the help of my knowledge of English plus an application I will convert it to English, but I will take into account what you say, I am currently based on the structure of Japanese web novels.

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The story is amazing, the mystery manages to catch, but where it shines the most are the characters and the love game, I'm eager to know what will end up happening with Akari and Asuna.

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Without a doubt what stands out the most is the depth of the characters, especially Hikaru, Akari, Emi, and Asuna, each one feels very alive. Also, the way you deal with anxiety seems quite real. And the other thing, the story and the play between comedy and drama is very well done.

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the plot is interesting the point of you being able to see Akari only if you has seen the death, i like the introduction of Colmillos because it gives a hint of other kind of creatures that can exist on this world and i´m waiting to see them

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I definitely recommend this story. At first I wasnt sure that I was going to like it but it caught my attention right away and I couldnt put my Phone down! Give it a try too.

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