Without a doubt what stands out the most is the depth of the characters, especially Hikaru, Akari, Emi, and Asuna, each one feels very alive. Also, the way you deal with anxiety seems quite real. And the other thing, the story and the play between comedy and drama is very well done.

the plot is interesting the point of you being able to see Akari only if you has seen the death, i like the introduction of Colmillos because it gives a hint of other kind of creatures that can exist on this world and i´m waiting to see them

Honestly, I like the story, the problem I have is how it's written. It's very hard to read this. When someone talks try surrounding the text with " instead of adding an - in front of the message. But overall, I like the rest of it. Solid characters and world-building. I recommend this story if you re-write it.

I definitely recommend this story. At first I wasnt sure that I was going to like it but it caught my attention right away and I couldnt put my Phone down! Give it a try too.