Review Detail of Spelloyal in The Owl house : A witch ?? no no ,I am a Magus
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To be honest, the idea was great, a fic full of potential, but completely wasted. The first chapter appears to have been was intentionally written in the most offensive way possible to upset as many readers as possible. An NTR sex scene right off the bat and a racist MC is really fucked up. After chapter 1 the story more or less stabilized with a very interesting concept and an MC who is not a good person but has good intentions, something like a less intelligent but a little less evil version of Leylin from WMW, but in chapter 19 he simply became a complete psychopath for no reason, he even started acting in the young master xianxia style by attacking and planning to kill and torture people for insulting him or making his back touch the ground. Seriously, if we ignore chapters 1, 19 and 20 this would even be a good fic to kill time, but these three chapters really screwed up the story in a way rarely seen.
The Owl house : A witch ?? no no ,I am a Magus
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You are partially correct. I still think you could have removed the racism and not detailed the sex scene without changing the plot or hurting the fic. I also believe that this arrogance was too extreme, no one likes annoying young masters who get offended by anything and immediately go for extreme punishments and you basically wrote an MC who acts like that. From a logical point of view and looking exclusively at the plot, your character being like this makes a certain amount of sense, but from a reader's or author's point of view, it doesn't make sense to write a main character using personality traits that are seen as unpleasant by the vast majority of readers. You could write an arrogant MC who dismisses inferiors without making him a young xianxia master. Despite this, I agree that giving two stars for these reasons wasn't very fair, I ended up lowering the rating too much because I felt very disappointed with the MC suddenly acting like a stupid xianxia asshole when I was enjoying the fic. I'll continue reading the fic a little more and write a fairer review around chapter 30 or 35.
Herohero:I'm going to be frank with you, you don't know how to write a review but I'm going to respond to your arguments for this review (which is clearly not objective and based on your personal preference). The chapter 1 was created to make the protagonist wants to obtain power (hence his tragic death), Yes my protagonist made raci*l remarks BUT he had his girlfriend stolen by a black and humiliated by him and kill*d by him (you want that he is a normal person after that??). My protagonist is proud yes, you don't like this YOUR problem but he has been the best at everything until now (it is logical that he is proud). You're talking about planning a murder, but my protagonist hasn't killed any humans or witches so far (only beast has k*lled a witch), you clearly incapable of understanding a fleeting idea. For the NTR scene, I give several warnings to skip if you have a fragile mind but you seem to appreciate it 💀. in short: as I say in my review, I would delete any review st*pid and I will keep chapter 1 🚬🗿 since the r*cism of Mc is tempory and logical given her trauma (yes she is temporary) Ps: you haven't understood my protagonist, he is a mixture of belos (a man broken by a particular race and who believes he is better than the one who hurt him) and leylin farlier an ambitious man who worries of his benefits un first but after his family. Little note: just for info, I'm not r*cist👀. The friend who wrote Amphibia is blackimage
I'm going to be frank with you, you don't know how to write a review but I'm going to respond to your arguments for this review (which is clearly not objective and based on your personal preference). The chapter 1 was created to make the protagonist wants to obtain power (hence his tragic death), Yes my protagonist made raci*l remarks BUT he had his girlfriend stolen by a black and humiliated by him and kill*d by him (you want that he is a normal person after that??). My protagonist is proud yes, you don't like this YOUR problem but he has been the best at everything until now (it is logical that he is proud). You're talking about planning a murder, but my protagonist hasn't killed any humans or witches so far (only beast has k*lled a witch), you clearly incapable of understanding a fleeting idea. For the NTR scene, I give several warnings to skip if you have a fragile mind but you seem to appreciate it 💀. in short: as I say in my review, I would delete any review st*pid and I will keep chapter 1 🚬🗿 since the r*cism of Mc is tempory and logical given her trauma (yes she is temporary) Ps: you haven't understood my protagonist, he is a mixture of belos (a man broken by a particular race and who believes he is better than the one who hurt him) and leylin farlier an ambitious man who worries of his benefits un first but after his family. Little note: just for info, I'm not r*cist👀. The friend who wrote Amphibia is black