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JacoPierLv122mth
2024-12-07 10:53

This was almost a great story, but it was ultimately ruined by the author's obsession with making MC have no connection to anyone or anything. I gave up around chapter 200. The characters, world, & plotlines were fantastic up until the dad returned. Then, he loses his fiance, his dad, and leaves everyone he's ever known, all for nothing. From what others have said, he'll even cut ties with his mother. Even if the author wanted to create a little drama and still have MC venture out on his own, it could have been done in a better way. For instance: - After dad returns, have them not always see eye-to-eye but slowly build a relationship. - During the dragon ruler competition, have him beat his cousin senseless, but not try to kill him. Then, with no one complaining, he could reveal what his aunt did. Making it clear that he's not just trying to get out of killing his cousin. - When pressed for evidence, the second uncle, Feng, or MC could then have/show up with a letter or something they intercepted between the Buddhist temple and the aunt. Proving that there was collusion. More investigation may be needed but it's a start. - Someone could then insult MCs mom, leading him to confront his dad and learn that she's alive. They get in an argument but ultimately MC decides to go himself to see her. Dad doesn't allow him and says that if he wants to go, he has to prove his strength by first retaking a now abandoned northern gate within 3 years. - MC leaves on mostly good terms, still ends up at the same place, but isn't a miserable sack of s**t. That's one of the countless ways this could have been done better. Ultimately, it's a huge let down that this story went the way it did because it had so much potential.

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mythosarcanaLv15

I went longer and feel the same. I disagree only that a broken bond could be more real but reconciliation with the mother as a bridge would have worked for me. I do agree author seems to want MC to suffer needlessly with no payoff at all. not even an "I told you so" moment where we could enjoy it.

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