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2024-11-21 14:00

Torture the mc novel for character development

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The novel had potential, but it suffers from several glaring issues that make it mediocre at best. Normally, I don’t write reviews unless I’ve read at least 100 chapters, but I’m making an exception this time. One of the biggest problems is the author’s lack of consistency. For example, a reward is set at 50,000 system points, but in the next chapter, it's suddenly 50,000 gold. The main character can read and fill out a form in another language one chapter, but a couple of chapters later, he suddenly can’t understand the same language. These inconsistencies pop up far too often. Another major weakness, and perhaps the most frustrating, is the main character (MC) himself, who is supposedly an assassin or soldier. Yet, he shows no sense of situational awareness. He acquires a system but barely checks it. He rushes into heroic actions without assessing anything or understanding the world he’s in. Despite having system points, he doesn’t use them. Worse, he quickly becomes a subordinate to a noble, even though he has guns while everyone else is using bows. I think the story would have been much better if the MC had leaned into a more morally gray or self-serving role—maybe not “kill-your-entire-family” evil, but more of a “me first, others later” attitude. As it stands, he doesn’t seem to think things through at all. There are too many issues with this novel for me to fully recommend it. My advice: try the first few chapters, but don’t expect it to make sense unless you turn your brain off. Based on what we've seen so far, he comes across as a complete doormat. [img=faceslap]

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