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Htun_Aung_Kyaw_6863Lv16mth
2024-09-18 11:40

I like you novel.The English is good and there are not a lot of error. I just wan to point out that the title you give to the novel is Military System.So I think the MC should focus and getting more powerful weapons and military vehicles. The first part is good, but later you move away from military to magic. Also, the demon king side figure out the use and make the copy of thr M4 within only one chapter that very fast. If your tilte and focus is the military system you should give the MC the adavantage of technology. Also the background of the world you haven't explain it properly. I really like military novel, yours is pretty good. So what I have written are my point of view.I appreshiate it if you read my comment and reply.If I have said anything wrong, I apologise.

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