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Lucas_Memeiro
Lucas_MemeiroLv12mth
2024-09-09 08:31

Estou ansioso pelo próximos capítulos, Gostei muito de como vc criou o MC, fiquei intriganto com os personagens e ansioso pra ver o Alex ainda mais forte

Reincarnated as Bella Swan's Brother (Twilight)

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4.2
143 Chs

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WhiteAuthor
WhiteAuthorAuthor

So I used to have this big review for myself, but I decided to delete it and just say this: I'm a cool dude. Read the Fanific. Yeeahh that's all.

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Iseeyou
IseeyouLv15

This is rough to read. Not to bad of a story overall. For a twelve year old with adhd. The author is unfortunately someone young and doesn’t know how to put a mature mindset into his writing. Which is understandable but still it makes the novel hard to read with the MC being very immature and super childish along with all of the other characters. If your young you’ll like this story and everyone is best of friends.

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Golias
GoliasLv5

... well, the MC constantly does and thinks about silly things, the worst thing is that if that were the only case, it would be possible to characterize only MC as childish, but everyone acts stupid along with him. The problem is not being childish, but knowing that people don't act like that, unfortunately...

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NunuXD
NunuXDLv12

The ADHD on this mc is very intense... I really love twilight fics, but I'd hard to read when the Mc can't focus on anything for more than 100 words :/

3mth
Leonardo_Henrique_0539
Leonardo_Henrique_0539Lv12

Author, everything is great with you. Don't abandon your readers; I can't stand unfinished fanfics anymore. I'm almost giving up on reading because of this. Your story is incredible! Just one thing: if you're going to do a harem, please make it make sense, hahaha.

5mth
Zeroren
ZerorenLv3

So I had to give up reading this and stopped at chapter 58. I'm the type of person to ignore reviews and judge the story myself whether it is good or not but for this I should have listened to the more bad reviews because they really did tell the truth. First off let me say this the story is decent it not great but it isn't terrible. The major problem with the story is like what everyone else has said the MC is horribly written. I will use this to describe him as a twelve-year-old who suffers from bipolar with some adhd thrown in while taking Adderall like candy. I hope someday this gets rewritten honestly keep the story the same but change the way the MC acts and this will instantly become a 5/5 novel in my book.

2mth
PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

Honestly, the story itself is not that bad BUT i just cant stand the MC, i would stay away from anyone like him irl, i feel like he has mental impairment.

3mth
Lucius_SS
Lucius_SSLv4

I really want to like this fic, but I've come to realize that even with so many chapters coming out. A lot of them have nothing of importance going on. If he combined maybe 2-3 chapters together, it might help and make paying for a chapter actually worth it. This story so far has been extremely casual and maybe slice of life-ish(not sure if im using that right). Something interesting might happen one chapter and then nothing for the next few after. It feels way too slow. I dont know how to feel about the mc. He's not terrible, but he has his glaring flaws, which can be annoying.

3mth
abyss_of_darkness
abyss_of_darknessLv10

beta MC, no calculation , just a fool, if its been real world mc won't be alive after 10 chapters. ............................................................

1mth
Caden_Dugan
Caden_DuganLv13

I like it so far hope you continue it!!!

5mth
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