I feel like this could be a good story but once again Chatgpt or another AI took a large part in writing this. The vocabulary and the way the scenes are described just feels unnatural and too deep for a fantasy novel. Maybe if you used a bit less AI and more of your own writing skills this could be better
thanks for your review ... it help me a lot
yes my novel is translate using ai. but my full scene is writing by me in Indonesian.
Riski_BambangAuthor
u feel it's a lot, maybe because my writing style is "mtl style" even in Indonesian structure.
the novel that I read before is all MTL.
I will try to improve more, thanks
Otaku_Network_7169Lv10
Auth , the novel lack emotions. it's more like i am reading a report or company notice. Maybe if you native language is English, the story will be more likable. You know where i am going? I just hope you consider this in your next novel. Hope u achieve great success as writer👍👍
Riski_Bambang:u feel it's a lot, maybe because my writing style is "mtl style" even in Indonesian structure.
the novel that I read before is all MTL.
I will try to improve more, thanks
Riski_BambangAuthor
for sure... i know...
basically I want to write something different than other author ... I will write the side thing more than just level up, level up, and again.
but, yeah, like u said... Its my first novel, my book lack of emotion .. I know 100%.
I have try to write some chapter with emotional ... but it's just direct, like when Nita cry for her parents...
thanks for ur suggestions & support 😁
Otaku_Network_7169:Auth , the novel lack emotions. it's more like i am reading a report or company notice. Maybe if you native language is English, the story will be more likable. You know where i am going? I just hope you consider this in your next novel. Hope u achieve great success as writer👍👍