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Sinful_Anarchy
Sinful_AnarchyLv134mth
2024-08-12 12:24

Personally speaking, I feel like this book has potential ;it being a rebate type system, however the fact that it's EXTREMELY fast past, and I do very much emphasize the extremely really throws readers off because it's pace is faster than the luxury cars being introduced after only what...2 days? that alot of things are not fleshed out and the characters aren't given much depth because of this. For example, he suddenly drives a luxury car despite being poor and depressed 24-48 hours before yet his brother has 0 reactions or thoughts, his father's girlfriend is like 'oh well, he probably won the lottery. He takes his brother shopping, packs the bags into the car after purchasing a luxury watch(which, by calculations should have been over his budget) , yet there's no mention of the brother after and he just goes to his new condo to sleep....where did the little boy disappear to during the shopping trip? There are actually a lot more plots holes that stems from the novel being too fast pace. Hopefully the author slows down, reviews and revise and insert some necessary filler chapters and patch the holes.

Getting A System In A Modern World

Daoist_Godfiend
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321 Chs

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Daoist_Godfiend
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Thanks for the review. Very much appreciated 💙

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XmishaX
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thank you for writing honest reviews. it allso help me as a beginner author to review my own work.

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Review done at chapter 40. Honestly this novel is just a cookie-cutter version of other novels in this genre. The story is running at 1000 mph, often resulting in mistakes or plot holes that can take one out of the story. This results in characters just being cardboard cutouts of people or being thrown to the side, such as the MC’s family. Additionally, the MC is just not engaging or interesting in my opinion, he feels like an empty vessel just being dragged around by the story, rarely facing any pushback or opportunities to really grow outside of fake raising his stats. I say fake because while he upgrades his stats, he still feels like the same person. Despite having intelligence stats 10x stronger than the average human, he sounds and acts like a clueless bumpkin most of the time that impulsively does things. Also this story is kinda predictable that there’s rarely any unique twists to this story. It feels like I’m reading a lower version of Getting a Technology System in The Modern Day. Honestly I would say if you like this genre that story is 10x more thought out than this one and characters are more interesting.

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Noisette
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I'm so sorry to write a bad review, but I found this novel to be really mediocre. I read 26 chapters and couldn't go on anymore as I felt that I was actually wasting my time on it. - The MC is as dumb as a rock. He is truly stupid. - The pacing if the story is messed up, on one hand, the progress with the system is way too fast it feels like it's being expedited, but on the other hand, the actual plot (if there IS one) hasn't really even started yet. - There are some passages that are just awkward and it feels like they were just inserted in the middle of random scenes. like the time the MC is going to buy a house and some random secretary starts feeling turned on lol, don't get me wrong I don't mind smut and erotica at all but the scene felt so out of place. it had nothing leading up to it and no follow up either... - The English is actually decent. I don't remember seeing grammatical mistakes and I'm usually meticulous about that so, although the writing style is average but the grammar is solid. I will not be continuing this novel, but those who like stories like this might enjoy it more than me so I still suggest people give it a try and judge by themselves, and I wish the author much more progress and success in the future.

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ascender
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I have to say it is a gem. A true gem i have read 45+ ch so far & it really good. i just hope mc can keep evolove in most perfect way.. author please continue this novel you have huge potential...

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Daoist_Godfiend
Daoist_GodfiendAuthor

Like who gives their own book a five-star review. I didn't want to do this but I had no choice. I'm writing this review for readers who have questions. Please ask your questions below. This is my first book and I hope not to disappoint. Thanks for reafding 💙

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Very good novel, keep it up please……………

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Reveal spoiler

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Great story, author. I hope you continue at the same pace.١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١١

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Danish_Creater
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Is a really good story keep up the good work

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nimko
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i have read up to 20 chapters so far so good

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