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Review Detail of Alfiemooon in Jujutsu Kaisen: Reborn as Potential Man. [Completed]

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Alfiemooon
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you can tell the author is inexperienced. it's just filled with exposition dumps and poor character dialogue, and the story itself isn't breaking any records, with silly character decisions and plot contrivance's everywhere. Nobody is developed, the author relies on our knowledge of the source material for that. it's just a huge mess. it needs serious revisions from the first chapter to even be considered a 2* piece of work.

Jujutsu Kaisen: Reborn as Potential Man. [Completed]

HeliosTheDepressed

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HeliosTheDepressed
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Well, if you say so Mr John Webnovel since you're apparently an expert at this

Alfiemooon
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I'm a literature and creative writing graduate, so yeah, I know a little about what I'm going on about

HeliosTheDepressed:Well, if you say so Mr John Webnovel since you're apparently an expert at this
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Bakenekon
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Glad I'm not the only one who thought so. Honestly, what's wrong with people.

HeliosTheDepressed
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Bakenekon:Glad I'm not the only one who thought so. Honestly, what's wrong with people.
Bakenekon
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HeliosTheDepressed:
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Kono_Timoda
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Yeah, same here!!! Now and again, I see this story pop up, and I'm like, "Oh, this is new." I checked the review number, and it seems promising. Nope, it's a dumpster fire with augured writing. Usually, this gets 1 star spammed until it averages around 3 stars or so. Some way, somehow, it has a 4.5, and I'm like, "HOW!! Explain yourself."

Bakenekon:Glad I'm not the only one who thought so. Honestly, what's wrong with people.
Kono_Timoda
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Although I agreed initially, there is a qualitative change between chapters 1 and 10; I don't know if it is a new editor or something but it's improving.

Lucky_Cat771
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Nah this one get 4-5 star because it's was good when compared to the other garbage jjk fic become pokemon catching fiction. and because the author was one of them(i mean the weird side of jjk fandom or you could say "true" jjk fans)

Kono_Timoda:Yeah, same here!!! Now and again, I see this story pop up, and I'm like, "Oh, this is new." I checked the review number, and it seems promising. Nope, it's a dumpster fire with augured writing. Usually, this gets 1 star spammed until it averages around 3 stars or so. Some way, somehow, it has a 4.5, and I'm like, "HOW!! Explain yourself."
Kono_Timoda
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Nvm Ch 11 has disproved this paragraph.

Kono_Timoda:Although I agreed initially, there is a qualitative change between chapters 1 and 10; I don't know if it is a new editor or something but it's improving.
HeliosTheDepressed
HeliosTheDepressedAuthorHeliosTheDepressed

this is my first every fic, obviously the first chunk of chapters are gonna be trash it becomes decent at around chapter 15 the fic actually becomes good at around chapter 28 imo, so any review past that is accurate to the star rating so if you want an accurate measure of how good this fic is, read to chapter 28 and if you still hate it then idk what to tell you

Kono_Timoda:Although I agreed initially, there is a qualitative change between chapters 1 and 10; I don't know if it is a new editor or something but it's improving.
Hidden_Wrath
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bro chill don't let them get into your head you're working on it the story isn't bad from what i can tell and you're actively trying to make it better screw the nay sayers

HeliosTheDepressed:this is my first every fic, obviously the first chunk of chapters are gonna be trash it becomes decent at around chapter 15 the fic actually becomes good at around chapter 28 imo, so any review past that is accurate to the star rating so if you want an accurate measure of how good this fic is, read to chapter 28 and if you still hate it then idk what to tell you
HeliosTheDepressed
HeliosTheDepressedAuthorHeliosTheDepressed

don't worry about me my guy, the fic has already been completed and i know it's really good just annoys me to no end when people judge only the worst parts of my work and call the rest trash

Hidden_Wrath:bro chill don't let them get into your head you're working on it the story isn't bad from what i can tell and you're actively trying to make it better screw the nay sayers