This story is main pitfall is it’s focus. Mainly the focus on power and relationships. The relationships or not why we read superhero stories. At least not romantic relationships. In most stories like this the relationships are at minimum tertiary. The villains, the plot, the setting, the powerset, or the intrigue are all more important than the romantic drama. It almost reads like a harem fic. The second issue is the powerset. I’m not gonna lie. I actually love it but to make it better I think he got a tone down a bit. His power should grow in conjunction with the story, because if he could solve all his problems with his powers, what would you write about? Another thing is that has powers that is mostly growing alone and that’s kind of uninteresting in the fic of the DC/invincible universe.
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