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1Redhead1
1Redhead1Lv36mth
2024-09-20 17:17

personality trash mc like disdain towards primitive people without much worldly experience (what do you expect from primitive people) and laziness to teach them knowledge to quench their curiosity etc. with a messy way to uplift the tribes livelihood and organized functioning society, he just bombarding them with things here and there without proper planning.

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Oakley_Tallent
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🤷‍♂️ mc does teach them, but with everything happening so fast, he can't exactly start a school to teach them everything from k-12 if he even has the knowledge to do that😅. So he teaches them how to do things, or gives them the basic materials and tells them what the final product should be like, letting them experiment to achieve success on their own🤷‍♂️. I have my own issues with the novel, but yours are not mine🤷‍♂️

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hello everyone, just wanted to let you know my thoughts on this book so far ~100chs in. The author often forgets what he has said in past chapters. For example, saying everyone's strength is limited to level 1 no matter how strong they are, yet still compares strength saying someone is stronger as a level 6, when all their powers are supposed to be limited suggesting there is no limiting factor🤦‍♂️. The pronouns used make it difficult to know who is talking and what gender they are, because the wrong pronouns are constantly used. The names all seem to be non-gender-specific. I'm not sure what gender a lot of the characters are because of the pronouns issue, but also because some male/female names seem to be used for the wrong gender. The flow of conversations will sometimes leave you scratching your head wondering what just happened because the responses make no sense based on what happened before and then what they end up doing after. On a plus note, the spelling seems pretty accurate so far, no notable mentions. The author desperately needs to write up a prologue to explain about the tribal fire, totems, and everything related to that to make things clearer to readers. Right now it seems like anything goes for the author🤦‍♂️. Overall, the book needs heavy editing. The story is interesting, but very confusing to keep track of what is what and what is happening. Makes me wish I had the time it takes to be an editor because there are a lot of books on web novel that desperately need a good editor😅. I like this book, but it's not good enough to pay for unless the author is willing to pay a really good editor to help make the story flow better. What is there is good, but it's like a diamond in the rough needing some heavy polishing to really stand out. Have a good day everyone!

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