Pros: I think your storytelling is great. The way you let the facts sink in is also great. But for a Naruto fan, some parts of the explanation may feel boring. Having watched Naruto myself years ago, I think the way you have darkened the universe is something many old Naruto fans would want. Cons: First of all, even if you mentioned somewhere in the synopsis or the review that it isn't a fanfic, it gives a fanfic vive. I don't know about the future chapters but for now, the pacing of the story is quite slow. I know that the words for the details to sink and to give info just in case someone with zero knowledge of Naruto reads it; it is also important to minimise those words to a bare minimum so that it feels like the story is progressing quickly. If you planned the slow pacing, I can't say much about it.
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