The story is decent with good writing and grammar ,mc is also normal unlike most of the mc in dxd fic who act like a bunch of horn dogs.while the stuff with oc's is getting a but boring its not too bad The only problem i found is how you dealt with mc's first encounter with rias it felt like it was done just for plot convenienvce with no thoughts given into it whatsoever, she is supposed to be the sole heir of gremory family and is only 14 or so during this timeline yet she was roaming alone with akeno in human realm( specifically in mc's town)looking for manga with no bodyguard ?she can just order them in her home why bother getting attacked and risking lives of civilians alongside and also she or akeno had no remorse for causing so many deaths due to their negleigence this was very much out of character.
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Negligence and Rias actually go together pretty well imo.
I mean yeah she is shown to be reckless and hot headed to do stupid things but she was also shown to be kind enough to be remorseful on her mistakes and responsible enough to know when she has fumbled.
I'm with you on that. Was just trying to be humorous. I didn't really consider that aspect of Rias while focusing on setting up Ken’s recognition of the supernatural aspects of the world. I chose her because I couldn't think of another Canon character that would make more sense in that location and time. To put things in perspective, the prefecture is on the south side of tokyo and just west of where Kuoh is speculated to be. Overall, though, should be an easy fix.
Just reread your review and noticed a mention about OC's. Just wanted to clarify if you or anyone else were aware that most of the characters introduced so far were from another anime called Love Hina. Hopefully that clears up some things for anyone reading this.
Most don’t watch love hina
I know, hence why I specified for the sake of those who might not know it.
