The writing quality is honestly what made me stpp reading it.Yeah it's not bad but damn it isn't good either.Maybe I've read to many high quality Fanfics or maybe I'm just not in the mood.I don't know but the writing quality is turning me off at least for now. story development: It's as much as you'll expect from any fanfic.So far it's okay??Nothing outstanding but nothing Bad either 3 stars. Character Design:It's at a 2 star I don't know what he looks like.All we know is he's got a shirt and short pants when he got in the world but now it's all gone..or uh "tattered prices of clothing". So that's a 2 star should be a 1 since the only thing we did know was what he was wearing but not anymore. Updating stability: Honestly I don't know much about it so I just put a default 4 stars. World Background: It's danmachi but since he's in the dungeon we don't get much of the world background and we don't get any descriptions of the Dugeon and what it looks like. So this is a 3 star...again I should've put it as a 1 but I'm not mean. overall: I've been really trying to find a danmachi fanfic that has the writing quality of "In danmachi with plasmids" My only issue with that fanfic is that it's Harem and i just can't bring myself to like Harem.Thats just weird to me. Overall though for this particular fanfic 2.8 is the rating.Writing quality not good and not bad..Grammar definitely needs some checking maybe add some commas here and there.Misspelling isn't bad but it's hard to understand without commas I have to reread everything just to make sure u didn't say "The goblin bit my neck with it's teeth and i stopped bleeding" I was hell of confused so writing quality is a 2 star.It will be a 3 star when grammar gets added and 4 star when the writing improves overall. In the end I say Read at your own discretion.
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/CRACK!/ /ROARRR!/ 'From the immense crystal wall, a large piece of stone broke out of it. Revealing the Goliath's face.' 7 'It roared with might, using its immense strength to free itself from the restraints of the wall.' 2 /Boom!/ /CRACK!/ 'Loud sounds of stone breaking and shattering echoed in the cavern.' 'A lot of dust was raised due to this, but the Goliath was so tall that Silver could still see its chest and face.' 6 'Goliath was an over 20M tall Humanoid monster. He looked almost human.' 5 (The best way to describe it would be to compare it with Eren's Titan from AoT.) 4 'Sillver got up and got ready.' "Mystic step." 2 (Also called cloud walk later on) -paragraph copy pasted from Danmachi with plasmids. Lil bro wants to read theatre. Jokes aside though, I dropped Plasmids due to my dislike of the writing style, so saying that my book is different is honestly a compliment.
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I noticed that you didn't address any of his points but just went straight to dissing the other author's story.
FangYuan1234:/CRACK!/ /ROARRR!/ 'From the immense crystal wall, a large piece of stone broke out of it. Revealing the Goliath's face.' 7 'It roared with might, using its immense strength to free itself from the restraints of the wall.' 2 /Boom!/ /CRACK!/ 'Loud sounds of stone breaking and shattering echoed in the cavern.' 'A lot of dust was raised due to this, but the Goliath was so tall that Silver could still see its chest and face.' 6 'Goliath was an over 20M tall Humanoid monster. He looked almost human.' 5 (The best way to describe it would be to compare it with Eren's Titan from AoT.) 4 'Sillver got up and got ready.' "Mystic step." 2 (Also called cloud walk later on) -paragraph copy pasted from Danmachi with plasmids. Lil bro wants to read theatre. Jokes aside though, I dropped Plasmids due to my dislike of the writing style, so saying that my book is different is honestly a compliment.
In the end I guess he did end up proving me wrong after chapter 10 the writing quality gets better or maybe it always good I was perhaps just not in the mood. The writing quality is better and everything is easy to understand.I ended up catching up and so far everything was good.I do agree he shouldn't have dissed the other authors work especially when the author others writing quality is much better but in the end the Harem ruined that novel.This novel though is worth a try for any of those who want to read it.
KamikazeDrew:I noticed that you didn't address any of his points but just went straight to dissing the other author's story.
There's nothing to address, I respect his opinion and am thankful for the time taken to review my work. I am just showing how the writing style of that book looks like. It's not dissing if it's the truth, and if someone is into that then all the more power to them.
KamikazeDrew:I noticed that you didn't address any of his points but just went straight to dissing the other author's story.
ur buggin
