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Keyaruga_Tsuki
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Ahem. 1:Writing quality was definitely upgraded after chapter 10.Everything flowed smoother and it was less confusing over all the writing quality took an extreme jump after chapter 10 and it was for the better.Im very much interested in the story and have caught up since my last review. 2:Story development is still around the same mark but it is starting to move and push onwards.Very interesting things have happened and the main cast is starting to appear this is going to get good.So these recent chapters have been great. 3:Character Design back in my last review it was awful BUT...now that I've caught up, I must say this is a very unique character Design and for that it deserves 5 stars.His evolution is awesome and his character Design incorporates that and I love it. 4:Updating stability this time around its a 3 star.You took a long break I don't know what happened but maybe that was just me.Im very sure you stopped uploading for awhile though but so far you're doing good so I'll see what happens in the future. 5:World background is pretty good.Many characters are being introduced and they all have their own way of thinking and their own speculation towards the Mc from their interactions.I like it. Overall: After chapter 10 the story has gone up and further upwards. 📊.I give it a proper 4.2 stars.It needs improvement on the writing quality but it's okay you aren't a veteran writer so it's fine any further improvement would be shocking but most definitely welcomed.As for Story development it's a 5 many things have happened and you will never guess what until u read so I suggest u read.Character Design is a 5 you can't go further than that. Updating stability again it's a 3, You took a long break.World background is a 4 the main cast is starting to show up so the ball is just now starting to roll.You should read the story its a very good fanfic.

True_Vanity
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Keyaruga_Tsuki
Keyaruga_TsukiLv4

The writing quality is honestly what made me stpp reading it.Yeah it's not bad but damn it isn't good either.Maybe I've read to many high quality Fanfics or maybe I'm just not in the mood.I don't know but the writing quality is turning me off at least for now. story development: It's as much as you'll expect from any fanfic.So far it's okay??Nothing outstanding but nothing Bad either 3 stars. Character Design:It's at a 2 star I don't know what he looks like.All we know is he's got a shirt and short pants when he got in the world but now it's all gone..or uh "tattered prices of clothing". So that's a 2 star should be a 1 since the only thing we did know was what he was wearing but not anymore. Updating stability: Honestly I don't know much about it so I just put a default 4 stars. World Background: It's danmachi but since he's in the dungeon we don't get much of the world background and we don't get any descriptions of the Dugeon and what it looks like. So this is a 3 star...again I should've put it as a 1 but I'm not mean. overall: I've been really trying to find a danmachi fanfic that has the writing quality of "In danmachi with plasmids" My only issue with that fanfic is that it's Harem and i just can't bring myself to like Harem.Thats just weird to me. Overall though for this particular fanfic 2.8 is the rating.Writing quality not good and not bad..Grammar definitely needs some checking maybe add some commas here and there.Misspelling isn't bad but it's hard to understand without commas I have to reread everything just to make sure u didn't say "The goblin bit my neck with it's teeth and i stopped bleeding" I was hell of confused so writing quality is a 2 star.It will be a 3 star when grammar gets added and 4 star when the writing improves overall. In the end I say Read at your own discretion.

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