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2024-10-18 05:03

Reading this is giving me headaches. It was okay at first. But now the information overload is too much (300+ chp). Your writing is stuck. U spent way too much time in unnecessary story development. I was forced to skip chapters cause it stopped making sense. Your story telling is all over the place. Fix your character levelling. It might make sense in your head but to me it's convoluted. Break your chapters into volumes and arcs. Rewrite this novel. It has potential. Ok byee Good luck.

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vokayroKLv15

This novel stands out as a remarkable example of the genre, offering readers a richly woven tapestry of imaginative world-building, intricate character design, and exceptional writing. From the very first page, it becomes clear that the author has invested great care in crafting a universe that feels both expansive and intimate, filled with unique cultures, landscapes, and lore. The protagonist is a brilliant and highly intelligent character whose actions and decisions are consistently portrayed with depth and realism. The author's ability to depict such a character convincingly is commendable, as it is not an easy feat to write someone who is genuinely smarter than most of those around them. This intelligent portrayal adds a layer of sophistication to the narrative, making it both engaging and thought-provoking. Character development is another highlight of this book. Each character, from the main cast to the supporting roles, is well-rounded and compelling. Their individual arcs are interwoven seamlessly with the plot, resulting in a story that feels organic and dynamic. The relationships and interactions between characters are particularly well-done, adding emotional depth and authenticity to the story. The world-building in this novel is nothing short of spectacular. The author has created a setting that is both fantastical and believable, with detailed descriptions that bring every scene to life. The magic system, political structures, and cultural elements are all carefully thought out, providing a rich backdrop against which the story unfolds. This level of detail enhances the immersion, making the reader feel like a part of this extraordinary world. The writing style is another strength of the book. The prose is eloquent and evocative, striking a perfect balance between descriptive richness and narrative drive. The pacing is well-judged, with a blend of action, suspense, and quieter, character-driven moments. This ensures that the story remains engaging throughout, keeping the reader hooked from beginning to end. In summary, this novel is a triumph of storytelling, combining exceptional world-building, intelligent character design, and beautiful writing. It is a must-read for fans of the genre, offering a reading experience that is both intellectually stimulating and deeply satisfying. The author has truly excelled in creating a book that stands out in the crowded fantasy landscape.

MartiniSippinAngel
MartiniSippinAngelLv14

For first time readers of the author's work, I would rate this a solid 4/5 stars It is one of the better written novels on this platform, and if you like the mana/dimensional apocalypse genre, with systems, loot, etc. you'll probably like this. However, anyone with any familiarity with the author will quickly realize that GA has nothing fresh to offer them. The bones of this story read like a remix of Dimensional Descent. We are once again placed in future Earth, under threat by transcendent forces which seek to transform it in disastrous ways. Again, the people of earth are given a way out through newly awakened powers. Both Sylas and Leonel have mysterious, noble backgrounds connecting them to the incoming mana/dimensional apocalypse. In both stories, all the factions (including government) aware of the peril Earth is in do nothing to prepare the ignorant masses for it. Both protagonists are described as underachieving geniuses, leading lives they find unfulfilling in one way or another, until they get shaken out of their malaise by the apocalypse. From the childhood sweetheart, to the romantically challenged protagonist, I can't help but be shocked on how similar the setups are in GA and DD. The best way to put it is that the sprinkles are different, but the cake is the same. Ultimately, if I had to predict this, against all odds, with the deck repeatedly stacked against him, surrounded by powerful factions that either want him dead or under their thumb, Sylas/Leonel will solo the universe with the help of their childhood sweetheart. If you want to explore the new mystery boxes and power sets the author came up with be my guest. But imho, 280+ ch deep, I'm dropping it. I don't need to wait till chap 4000.

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