Review Detail of TeetoBanditto in From Mortal to Shinobi

It's hard to seriously review this... thing. This 'novel' is what I like to call "Authors Rambling". There are two reasons for that: 1) it contains close to zero actual plot. Story has something around 30-40k words and closest we get to action is MC having to take care of his little sister, while his mother cooks. When it comes to writing as a form of art, this is a clear mistake. Inability to effectively mix action and information is very important for a successful author. But some people might like to read a fantasy diary of magical pseudoscience. 2) Second reason I call it 'rambling' is because everything you read is completely inconsequential. I had it put on audio while I did some work and probably 30% of the time I was partly zoned out. Not even once though I had a moment when I would wonder 'what did I miss' or 'what led to something'. I could summerize 40 chapters of this fanfic in one or two chapters and not only you wouldn't miss anything but it would probably improve your experience. Author needs to learn to pace his story better, to show and reward MCs progress better than by writing "after 3 days I managed to do it. Anyways, next I will...". For those who like to read things like this: godspeed. For those who don't: my advice is to wait and see if this story reaches 200k words, if it does read the first 2-3 chapters, skip the next 40-50 and see if anything is happening at that point. Oh, and I actually bother to say all that because except the point I made, writing is surprisingly decent.