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Davlyn
DavlynLv156mth
2024-08-20 15:07

Endearing start, taboo cliches, surprisingly little nationalism. Irritating changes in character and repetitive phrases to accommodate word padding. FML treated as a dumb ditsy weakling. Slow paced with no real improvement, ML ignores system use "Father system" and spends more time speaking sweet nothings to his wife than raising and teaching his children. 20ish Shameless plugs into other books you have to pay for if you want to buy in bulk and get a discount. All of that, while moderately irritating, doesn't detract from what is at minium, a well written book. What does disgust me and ultimately made me regret reading it, was the random weird cultivation turn that ultimately serves no purpose. If I wanted a cultivation hack'n'slash, they're a dime a dozen. I definitely wouldn't be reading a story that purportedly revolves around a 'father system' As for coherent grammatically correct writing, it is on point, so if my complaints sound like 'noting much' to you, you will probably enjoy it.

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Dolphin_Clan
Dolphin_ClanLv13

agreed. the 15-20 padded promotion chapters for another book of theirs is so stupid

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Alanray64
Alanray64Lv15

I have only read the first lot of free chapters but from what I have read, I am actually am enjoying this novel. So we have the standard system novel however this one is tied to the MC making his suddenly acquired family of quads (from a drunken one night stand earlier with the campus belle), to be cared for, loved and raised right. From the get go there are road blocks appearing in the MCs path that he has to overcome. One being that Bai Susu is from some very wealthy family, with her life very much controlled in her growth. Her parents see her as a tool for benefits, whilst she only has family love from her grandfather. Basically the reader learns that the family will not allow such a relationship to develop as Ye Fan (MC) is not rich, nor from a notable background, and therefore won’t bring any benefits to the Bai Clan. The system rewards the MC with money and skills for doing acts of good for his family, from what I have read he has gained so far, one skill, body attributes increases, a pile of baby gear plus some parent gifts and, I think it was, 4 million 200 thousand dollars, yuan, not sure, though it seemed a pretty rounded type of returns. The negatives. Gender issues cropping up here and there, since this is being translated I would hope the person doing this job can improve his/her game. Also there is a number of grammar issues which are mild but for me I find it a bit jarring. Some leaps of assumptions that you can gloss over, I wasn’t phased by them but I did note them. Anyways, I don’t know what it is about this novel, however I was compelled to read all the free chapters as it is a nice feel good story that did make me smile reading of the antics happening. Overall, in my mind, I believe it is worth a read. I hope it appeals to others.

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