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ThePandaCritic
ThePandaCriticLv11yr
2024-04-23 04:48

Thoughts it's an interesting idea. The grammar is great. The presentation of the status in most of the chapters is awesome. Problems, first Idk If ur waiting to make the connection or not but the system choice for a rapper for the Mc whn the only connection to rap for him is jail time and where he lived. There seem to be no history there of a young someone who's trying but don't hv a break or something thts rooted in rap hence why the system choose him and also a rap system. Also the Mc seem to not be interested in finding this out also and another thing which is forgotten or maybe it turn into the butler, the system is sentient like n the Mc is just chill with that WHY also that aspect of the system is not explore after tht. Another thing is since the system cn create a human per say and money and also a house with equipments, it begs the question is this magic or mechanical because again this doesn't seem to bother the Mc 1 bit like how's this happening. Also I'm curious why hv the Mc use a label whn theres SoundCloud or Spotify to grow ...Maybe sing in the streets or at those pop up bars with a little crowd to build a following.

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AmSincere
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152 Chs

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Chi_9119
Chi_9119Lv13

Dang so I’m guessing the mc is just a stupid mf that doesn’t think before he does shit

7mth
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parthu_dinakar
parthu_dinakarLv4

Hi there, I don't really see fanfics or light novels on hip hop, so I want this to continue. PLS

1yr

InternetSaint
InternetSaintLv1

He looks homose*ual.

1yr
Danshaku
DanshakuLv4

This is gonna be good. Though the MC needs some roughing up since he's way goody two shoes and a articulate speaker to be a street hustler. He lack that certain bounce and confidence in his personality that makes the rapper click. So instead of being real he looks like a wannabe. Would still look forward to next chapter though since it's only CH 14 as of now and maybe he'll get character development. Cause as 8 miles once said "There's no such thing as a half-way crook"

1yr
SuryaputraKarna
SuryaputraKarnaLv4

how this book has fallen, from rap to conspiracy theory blood rituals. Bro not to sound too critical but wth are you doing with this book, Since you told you wanted to drop it, it is going downhill since. It is better to drop than destroy a good story

7mth
_Yasuke_
_Yasuke_Lv4

I rocc wit it, don’t stop posting my boi

12mth
Kupiter
KupiterLv4

Reveal spoiler

11mth
kingroq
kingroqLv4

good day author san since you have stopped writing this fic and will not continue it why not give it to someone else to continue.

5mth
Phantomslime
PhantomslimeLv4

Overall great story, sad to see he is gonna drop tho, hopefully in the future he has a change of heart because this was one of not the best music stories I’ve ever read

6mth
Fanum
FanumLv4

Bro make him be like 50 cent when he first started.Dissing everybody.

1yr
Amarjit_Boruah
Amarjit_BoruahLv1

One don't know how long I have been looking for a good story on hip hop and found none this is all what I hoped and more . Godspeed and keep going thank you for this work

1yr
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