Ha ha, I got the first review. Very good.
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I also assisted in the making of this.
Hm. The ideas behind this seems to be decent, but the writing style is a mess. Too much complicated, over top stuff, obsessively overdescribed wording. This is a scipt at best and a bad story at worst. You know, If I could, I would like to help make this story decent, but its very hard to say the stuff I want in such a unpersonal way. I tried to write helpful, constructive criticism before, but it Just doesn't convey my intensions properly. This is currently only 2 chapters. The only thing that can make this better is a rewrite. Nothing here seems to be thought out, just sum' random thoughts smacked on a Keyboard. I don't even know why I have the need to review this in the first place, but whatever.. Cheers I guess. (Nothing personal, rly. Seriously)
The story quite boring and background character story quite basic to overpowered if other god in danmachi quite smart they can easily know all Buddha familia is from another world after all they came from nowhere it will more fun and interesting if buddha in that story insert background story like he is mortal from ancient time who ascending becoming a god long before god descent on mortal world so he not bound to heavenly rule because he is ex mortal that will be more interesting story or that multiverse power entity can just alter reality for example he can just use some king or famous people in danmachi world to become background story for mc to use so god not be suspicious about mc when mc engraved flana.
5 stars since i contributed in this story by giving ideas and also cuz you are writing it...will update this review after a few chapters maybe.
The Plot is good, the character's develop is OK (Blame the writing style), and overall it is good. But there are grammar errors (Not much), and some phrasing mistakes but still good.
A great work done by my brother 🙂, though it has some notable grammar mistakes, it's good to read it, I enjoyed every chapter of it. Hope you will upload more 😉😉
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It was a nice story until you started focusing on the teammates of mc. I mean the use of having an mc is that the story should revolve around him. Anyway I'm gonna drop until the story goes back to mc.
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ignore powerscaling when reading this because it gets thrown out the window, at least canon strength scaling.
really good story in was not held at gun point to write this review i swear it on my life. just read the story and stop worrying. gosh
Takuya accidentally travels to the world of Naruto with a max-level game account. As a mixed-blood Uchiha, Takuya states: "Sharingan? Mangekyō? Aren't these standard equipment? Once you reach the right age, don't they naturally awaken? Why do you need emotional trauma to activate the eyes? Why do you need to transplant eyes to obtain the Eternal Mangekyō? That's so outdated! A real man should awaken it on his own! As for the Nine-Tails, isn't it a common pet? Look, my Nine-Tails is even white! It can fight independently outside my body and even resist the Ten-Tails! This is how the Nine-Tails should be! Kurama, you..." Disclaimer: The cover image is not owned by me. If you are the original owner and would like it removed, please kindly let me know. Note: This work is a translation. Original Author: 萌音芊芊 (Mengyin Qianqian) Original Title: 火影:我带着满级号穿越了 (Naruto: I Traveled with a Max Level Account)
Having found himself reincarnated into the My Hero world our main protagonist will try to live up to his name sake
Reborn as a Uchiha; only one year left until the night of the clan's massacre? It's over, I'm done for. With Uchiha Itachi taking action, there's no way to survive! However, fortunately, I have a life simulator. Initial simulation begins... [After half a month, you enroll in the Ninja Academy and learn basic knowledge!] [After three months, you have mastered the method of chakra extraction and have been influenced by the Will of Fire!] [After nine months, you successfully master the Clone Technique.] [After twelve months, on the night of the clan's massacre, you watch as your friends and family are all killed before your eyes. In fear and anger, you successfully awaken your eyes, but then, you are killed!] [Please choose an item to retain after the simulation!] [Option 1: All the knowledge and skills you have learned!] [Option 2: The increased amount of chakra!] [Option 3: The awakened bloodline state!] Disclaimer: I do not own the rights to the cover image. If you are the rightful owner and would like it removed, don't hesitate to get in touch with me, and I will take it down promptly. ------- This is a Translation ------- Original Author: 作者:静静小花 RAW NAME: 忍界:我有人生模拟器
Rob was a high-level hacker and wanted by many government organizations because he leaked the secrets of many countries. So he didn't dare to come out of his hiding much. Since he was alone, he lived a difficult life, which that he found the joy and the excitement of life in only two things: The rule of the Internet, and the anime world. One day he came across an interesting advertisement on his personal computer that turned his life upside down. [Ding!] [The art publishing system is being prepared...] [The system is ready!] From that time onwards his goal became to draw One Piece manga in the pirates' world! And make the great era of pirates even more chaotic! ¶¶¶¶¶ Author: BlackStar_BH (Me) ¶¶¶¶¶ Note: Needless to say, this book has the same idea as "Creating The Manga Of Naruto On Naruto World Become My Ultimate Goal!" But here it applies to the world of One Piece, I was inspired by the idea and I wanted to apply it to the world of One Piece, and I hope it succeeds, of course, there will be a conspiracy and I will make sure to improve the story according to the readers opinions. ¶¶¶¶¶ As for publishing chapters, it would depend entirely on the interaction the story receives, whether it is 4 chapters a day or 2 chapters or 1 chapter or 0 chapters... It all depends on the readers' enthusiasm for this interesting book. ¶¶¶¶¶ I don't own One Piece nor do I own its characters, all I own is the protagonist, after all, this is just a fanfic without any profit, just for fun. I don't own Bleach, Attack on titan, Hunter X Hunter, Naruto, and I don't own their characters. ¶¶¶¶¶ EXTRA TAGS: #ATTACKONTITAN #HUNTERXHUNTER ¶¶¶¶¶ My Patreon: https://www.patreon.com/BlackStar_BH (+30 Chapters ahead Webnovel.) My Ko-fi: (New) https://ko-fi.com/blackstar_bh (+30 Chapters ahead Webnovel.)
Patreon[.]com/0DayDream0 ========================= Lan traveled to the world of Hunter x Hunter and awakened the Nen ability of Infinite Surprise Blind Box. As long as he finds specific people and places, he can find the blind box, and after opening it, he will gain something from the infinite world! He just needs to participate in the plot and interact with the main characters to open a variety of blind boxes! So, Lan embarked on the path to becoming stronger, which was the easiest way to reach the top of the world! ========================= Patreon[.]com/0DayDream0
"My treasure? If you want it, you can have it! Go and find it! I left everything in the world there!" With these words, the Pirate King, who had just died, sparked the Great Pirate Era. On Maple Leaf Island, a young lumberjack reads the headline in the newspaper, but his face shows a deep sense of melancholy... World(Currently):- 1- 95: One Piece 95 - 125: Familiar Of Zero 125 - 235: One Piece 235 - 307: Mushoku Tensei: Jobless Reincarnation 307 - 334: One piece 334 - 386: Re Zero 386 - 395: One Piece 395 -.....: Akame ga Kill! -The cover is not mine. Please let me know if you want me to remove it.- Title: 从海贼开始万界模拟
A Young man who died of an incurable disease in his late teen finds himself in the world of Naruto before the first great shinobi war. He wasn't blessed with a system like he had read in the stories, however, what he had was a body that could endlessly absorb a form of energy far superior to Chakra. The only limit to his potential being time. This is a translation of a completed work. Author:脑洞筑梦师:余青衣
On the night of the Uchiha Massacre, Uchiha Yi awakened a system dedicated solely to developing Fire Release techniques! - Fire Release: Flame-Flame Fruit – Control flames and achieve elemental body transformation! - Fire Release: Devouring Void Flame – Devour bloodlines and optimize oneself! - Fire Release: Amaterasu – Black flames that burn eternally! - Fire Release: Ryūjin Jakka – "All things in creation, reduced to ash!" … Where the Will of Fire burns, the flames of the Uchiha will never die. When the fire of the Uchiha illuminates the village, you will pay the ultimate price! --- RAW: 火影:这个宇智波只会火遁术! --- Read up to 20 chapter ahead of time on patreon.com/Legendryweeb {please give this novel 5 Star review and power stone} *Thank you*