ignore powerscaling when reading this because it gets thrown out the window, at least canon strength scaling.
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Hm. The ideas behind this seems to be decent, but the writing style is a mess. Too much complicated, over top stuff, obsessively overdescribed wording. This is a scipt at best and a bad story at worst. You know, If I could, I would like to help make this story decent, but its very hard to say the stuff I want in such a unpersonal way. I tried to write helpful, constructive criticism before, but it Just doesn't convey my intensions properly. This is currently only 2 chapters. The only thing that can make this better is a rewrite. Nothing here seems to be thought out, just sum' random thoughts smacked on a Keyboard. I don't even know why I have the need to review this in the first place, but whatever.. Cheers I guess. (Nothing personal, rly. Seriously)
The story quite boring and background character story quite basic to overpowered if other god in danmachi quite smart they can easily know all Buddha familia is from another world after all they came from nowhere it will more fun and interesting if buddha in that story insert background story like he is mortal from ancient time who ascending becoming a god long before god descent on mortal world so he not bound to heavenly rule because he is ex mortal that will be more interesting story or that multiverse power entity can just alter reality for example he can just use some king or famous people in danmachi world to become background story for mc to use so god not be suspicious about mc when mc engraved flana.
5 stars since i contributed in this story by giving ideas and also cuz you are writing it...will update this review after a few chapters maybe.
The Plot is good, the character's develop is OK (Blame the writing style), and overall it is good. But there are grammar errors (Not much), and some phrasing mistakes but still good.
A great work done by my brother 🙂, though it has some notable grammar mistakes, it's good to read it, I enjoyed every chapter of it. Hope you will upload more 😉😉
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It was a nice story until you started focusing on the teammates of mc. I mean the use of having an mc is that the story should revolve around him. Anyway I'm gonna drop until the story goes back to mc.
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really good story in was not held at gun point to write this review i swear it on my life. just read the story and stop worrying. gosh
Hagoromo Gensou transmigrated to the Naruto world and, through his own efforts, became a prominent figure in the ninja world. Until one day, the newly appointed Five Kage teamed up and ambushed him immorally. It was only then that the system finally appeared, claiming it could help him rise to become the strongest in the ninja world. However... Just as he was about to confront the Five Kage head-on, Gensou silently looked at the first task issued by the system. [Quest: Ninja School Comeback Initiated! Please defeat your dead-last classmate, Uzumaki Naruto.] "System, do you know what year it is now?" [Year 60 of Konoha] "Right now, it's Year 2 of Konoha! Is there something wrong with this system?!" ... Many years later, Gensou opened his eyes again, standing on the rooftop of the Chunin Exams building. Looking at the Third Hokage, who was ready for battle, he smirked slightly: "Although it's a few decades early, I finally made it." www.patreon.com/zaelum [+20 Extra Chapters!] [Raw: 火影:我都硬刚五影了,系统才来]
Waking in a strange yet familiar room the main character now will rise to the top of one most dangerous worlds of fiction with his new cheat. P*TREON:(without spaces) patreon . com / Evans269
Transmigrated into the world of High School DxD, Roy believed he had been handed a life of luxury and glory. Born into the prestigious Lucifuge family, with his Sister Grayfia as his strict yet devoted older sister, he thought he was destined for greatness. 99,997… 99,998… 99,999… 100,000!! But... reality proved harsher: Roy lacked demonic talent and, despite years of training, remained a Low-Class Devil. his peers effortlessly achieve High-Class status, he’s been trapped in a cycle of endless sword practice and ridicule. Yet, he refused to accept mediocrity. Ten thousand sword swings a day, relentless training.. Until one day.. [Ding! The Strongest Demon King System has been activated. Access functions to learn more.] --- - High School DxD - Main World! 1 - High School of the Dead [●] - First - World Traveled 2 - Demon Slayer [●] - Second - World Traveled 3 - Akame Ga Kill [●] - Third - World Traveled 4 - Bladedance of Elementalers [●] - Fourth - Current World
Akira Kisaragi traverses into the Bleach world, unlocking a check-in system. He initially thought that by checking in daily, he could become stronger, soon become the Captain-Commander, join Division Zero, punch Yhwach, kick the Soul King, and marry Unohana... However, the system's style wasn't quite what he had imagined. 〈 Check-in complete, obtained Genryūsai Yamamoto's secret roasted sweet potato! 〉 〈 Check-in complete, obtained exclusive attribute: King of Normal Attacks, effect... 〉 〈 Check-in complete, obtained Retsu Unohana's... 〉 Akira's eyes suddenly lit up! “Seems like this might not be so bad after all!” ________ Note: This is just a translation from a fanfic, so neither I claim ownership over it, neither the original author can claim ownership over Bleach. So, let's just have fun. I hope you like it! Raw: 死神:从签到开始的最强剑八 or Bleach: The Strongest Kenpachi Starting from Check-ins Author: 临渊养鱼 or Fishing by the Abyss Patreon for more fanfics and advanced chapters: https://www.pa-treon.com/mrblackwing
[Dimensional Magic Cube's Instructions] [1. The Dimensional Magic Cube can automatically absorb the energy that exists in the dimension. Once a month, it can randomly open a dimensional channel and perform dimensional travel.] [2. The Dimensional Magic Cube has the ability to convert various powers from different dimensions, ready to be activated and used at any time.] [3. There is a storage space inside the Dimensional Magic Cube, which can be opened and used at any time.] [4. ...] This is the story of a man who once couldn't choose his own future but vowed to live for himself in this new life. Carrying the Dimensional Magic Cube, Riezel arrived in the world of swords and magic and wandered through different worlds, hoping to find a new beginning. === In a nutshell, a story about a man from Earth who got transmigrated into a fantasy world (original world that act as the main world) and has the ability to travel to various anime worlds to become stronger. Visited Worlds: 1. Danmachi (Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon?) 2. Demon Slayer (Kimetsu no Yaiba) 3. Overlord 4. ... === This is a translation. I'm translating as I read and making some modifications to the story if needed. Author: Ruqing Rusu Original: https://book.qidian.com/info/1035015624 === Support and read advanced chapters at: patreon.com/VALRRR
[One Piece, Naruto, ,Demon Slayer: Kimetsu no Yaiba , Attack on Titan, Marvel, DC, One punch man, Douluo Dalu, BTTH, Fairy Tail, Harry Potter, Reverend Insanity ETC...] MC is Akira ------------------------------------------------------------ If there is danger in one place, they will leave and return later to destroy it. The Uchiha Clan was planning a coup out of helplessness. But when they found a safe way, a light in their dark life, they took it. Now, in the multiverse, the Uchiha will become the greatest ever. Itachi is a kind young man in the Uchiha, but to enemies, he’s a nightmare. Shisui is like a natural disaster across all worlds, but his heart remains pure. Sasuke was on the verge of becoming a gangster. Mikoto is finally living the life she always dreamed of with her husband. After returning to Konoha, the Uchiha will awaken the undead—for the greater good and to make things right. Previous: Demon Slayer: Kimetsu no Yaiba Original World: Naruto First World: One Piece Second World: Attack on Titan Third world:..... --------------------------------------------------------------- To clarify before reading: "This novel is partially my own creation and Mostly a modified translation until chapter 121 then I began writing it myself. The raw I took from: 木叶排挤:我带宇智波去大航海 ----------------------------------------------------------------- You can support me and read up advanced chapters at: patreon.com/_Coreal
[Previous title: Demon Slayer: let me be a human again.] Aoki dies and is reincarnated in another world, where he begins a new life with his master, a skilled hunter. However, an unfortunate event leads Aoki to a startling realization: the world he has reincarnated into is the one depicted in Demon Slayer, a popular anime from his previous life. To make matters worse, Aoki has been turned into a demon. Now, his sole goal is to reclaim his humanity while retaining the powers he has gained. But is it really that simple? Can Aoki turn back into a human, or will his growing strength pull him further away from his humanity? This is the story of Aoki, a man who journeys through different worlds, gaining incredible powers. This is just an translation original work: 鬼灭:请让我当个人吧 If you want an early access join my patreon:- patreon.com/ANelite 40 Advanced Chapters
Sanders has crossed into the world of One Piece, blessed with a unique ability: he can derive and master any power—Haki, Devil Fruits, combat techniques—everything can become his. To survive and grow stronger in this chaotic world, he joins the Marines, seeking structure and safety. But fate takes a dark turn when his adoptive parent is ruthlessly murdered by a Celestial Dragon. Sanders vows revenge, yet before he can act, he is captured by Sengoku and Kizaru, locked away in the depths of Impel Down. In the infamous prison, Sanders uses his power to derive new abilities from legends around him: the Moa Moa no Mi, the Fusion-Fusion Fruit, even Barrett's fearsome Haki. As years pass, Sanders grows more powerful, biding his time. Finally, he decides the moment has come—he walks out of Impel Down, shaking the world to its core. "You fought Kaido in a fierce battle; derivation time for the Azure Dragon Fruit reduced by one year." "You battled Whitebeard with all your strength; Gura Gura no Mi (Quake-Quake Fruit) successfully derived." "You clashed with Big Mom; her indomitable Steel Balloon Physique is now yours." At the Summit War, Sanders challenges the might of all three Admirals singlehandedly. Marine Headquarters: "He was once one of us; now, we regret it deeply." Boa Hancock: "I’ll stand by Sanders—let’s declare war on the Celestial Dragons!" Nico Robin: "Only he can bring me true safety." Join Sanders as he faces the mightiest forces of the One Piece world, deriving power from the strongest to fulfill his destiny. -------------- Access 30 chapters in advance on my Patreon: p@treon.com/OneFic This is a translation work; I do not own it. Raw:航海:推衍万物,顶上硬撼三大将