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Hm. The ideas behind this seems to be decent, but the writing style is a mess. Too much complicated, over top stuff, obsessively overdescribed wording. This is a scipt at best and a bad story at worst. You know, If I could, I would like to help make this story decent, but its very hard to say the stuff I want in such a unpersonal way. I tried to write helpful, constructive criticism before, but it Just doesn't convey my intensions properly. This is currently only 2 chapters. The only thing that can make this better is a rewrite. Nothing here seems to be thought out, just sum' random thoughts smacked on a Keyboard. I don't even know why I have the need to review this in the first place, but whatever.. Cheers I guess. (Nothing personal, rly. Seriously)
The story quite boring and background character story quite basic to overpowered if other god in danmachi quite smart they can easily know all Buddha familia is from another world after all they came from nowhere it will more fun and interesting if buddha in that story insert background story like he is mortal from ancient time who ascending becoming a god long before god descent on mortal world so he not bound to heavenly rule because he is ex mortal that will be more interesting story or that multiverse power entity can just alter reality for example he can just use some king or famous people in danmachi world to become background story for mc to use so god not be suspicious about mc when mc engraved flana.
5 stars since i contributed in this story by giving ideas and also cuz you are writing it...will update this review after a few chapters maybe.
The Plot is good, the character's develop is OK (Blame the writing style), and overall it is good. But there are grammar errors (Not much), and some phrasing mistakes but still good.
A great work done by my brother 🙂, though it has some notable grammar mistakes, it's good to read it, I enjoyed every chapter of it. Hope you will upload more 😉😉
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It was a nice story until you started focusing on the teammates of mc. I mean the use of having an mc is that the story should revolve around him. Anyway I'm gonna drop until the story goes back to mc.
ignore powerscaling when reading this because it gets thrown out the window, at least canon strength scaling.
really good story in was not held at gun point to write this review i swear it on my life. just read the story and stop worrying. gosh
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