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Vainglory0
Vainglory0Lv47mth
2024-05-03 22:22

The MC is brain dead and the none of the characters show him any respect despite him being the count regent. What's worse is, the MC doesn't even mind the way they treat him. The side characters only exist to second guess and question each and every decision/order of the MC to the point where it makes me question who the count is. They simply treat him like a commoner. And they are all as brain dead as MC to boot. They call a race that battles ferocious monsters in they island all their life 'inferior to humans' and cannot accept the fact that someone from such a race can have higher potential than a human. And then, after the guy proves himself by winning on spar they start fangirling him like he is the most popular host in a host club. The MC doesn't mind all these things but when his older brother calmly explains to him that his mother cant take over his responsibilities because she is a commoner(he meant no harm, he cares a lot about the MC and was only trying to make the MC understand coz he is a pompous 12 year old brat despite the fact that he is supposed to be mentally a lot older). And once even mentions starting a rebellion against capital in public for no real reason.

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novelmeister
novelmeisterLv15

In any progression fantasy novel, there needs to be some adversity or controversy to draw readers in. This is likely why it doesn’t seem a nobleman is treated like one in a novel.

Vainglory0
Vainglory0Lv4

That's not "adversity or controversy" lol. That's just bad writing.

novelmeister:In any progression fantasy novel, there needs to be some adversity or controversy to draw readers in. This is likely why it doesn’t seem a nobleman is treated like one in a novel.
DeathLingers
DeathLingersLv14

well I doubt he's really op and well too many females supporters it seems too so this helped mr just about this

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